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"Heat", Theme 29: Reformed

Apr 02, 2009 21:24

Title: Heat
Universe: Nolanverse
Genre: General
Rating: PG
Characters: Scarecrow
Word Count: 432
Warnings: None
Summary: Everyone wants Jonathan to know that they're going to help him get better.

( He imagined hot flowers of heat filling the corridors; he imagined the sun blooming over the horizon, over the skyline, spilling its petals into the streets. )

character: scarecrow, universe: nolanverse, theme 29: reformed

Comments 9

sammage_art April 3 2009, 23:07:56 UTC

This? Was amazing. I like how in so few words you were able to breathe life into both Jonathan and Gotham City. Really well done.

chaumiamor April 4 2009, 01:14:09 UTC

Oh, thank you! C:

alocin42 April 3 2009, 23:39:01 UTC

I really liked this, very evocative visual language and you managed to pack all that plus plotness into the 500 words!

The lines comparing the knowledge of the chemical reactions to the understanding roomful of ticking clocks = love.

(Is this your first entry on this comm? Sorry if it's not - I'm not very observant - but I just don't recall seeing your name before. If it is then welcome and keep up the excellent entries!)

chaumiamor April 4 2009, 01:13:45 UTC

Thanks so much! Admittedly the 'watches' bit was partially inspired by (get ready for itttt) Watchmen.

(This is indeed my first entry. :3 Thank you for the welcome!)

alocin42 April 4 2009, 10:44:28 UTC

Watching and reading Watchmen is still on my to-do list, so I would have missed that if you hadn't said! The image did remind me a bit of Sylar in Heroes as well, which I don't know if you've seen, but repairing clocks and, um, really "getting into" brains was quite his thing.

Anyway I hope you'll enjoy it here! :D

chaumiamor April 5 2009, 16:53:46 UTC

The Watchmen reference comes from the character of Doctor Manhattan - his father was a watchmaker, but now, as a bona fide super hero, he now has a completely amazing concept of time, where he can look forward and back. I just had him passing through my brain when I wrote this piece. I highly recommend giving the comic a read, but of course I'm sure most people tell you that. ;)

And thanks, I think I will! Mmm batfic is nice.

peter_24601 April 4 2009, 22:41:27 UTC

Excellent character piece... nicely written!

chaumiamor April 5 2009, 16:54:15 UTC

Thanks very much! :)

amara_anon April 6 2009, 01:51:12 UTC

This piece has a well-established moody atmosphere to it. You did a great job painting not only a picture but a feeling with your imagery. The heat of the city, Jonathan's psychosis, it was all palpable. I did get a slight Watchmen vibe from it; reminded of Rorschach and his psychiatrist. I like that you end with the feeling that Scarecrow is going to get out and wreak havoc on Gotham once again. Welcome to the community, and thanks for sharing! :)