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la_marquise_de_ The rules:
1. Go to page 77 (or 7th) of your current ms
2. Go to line 7
3. Copy down the next 7 lines - sentences or paragraphs - and post them as they’re written. No cheating.
The chunk from page 77 was awful, so I went with page 7:
“How is he?”
Josan jumped at the sound of his lord’s voice. “His body will heal, shaheev,” he said, using
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Does it change your perception if you already know (from earlier context) that:
• The scene is in Lord Cono's POV
• Lord Cono is not a Southron
• His people have been kicking Southron ass in wars for several years
• They're not speaking Southron, but rather the language of Cono's country
• Josan is his (Southron) slave captured years ago
• The Targ is of a third group of people entirely
• No Targ has ever been successfully captured and enslaved
I know, authors shouldn't argue with critics. But the only line I recognize as potentially reading like exposition is ...using the Southron word of a devoted retainer speaking to his superior. In context, it's not intended as a discussion of the language, but rather an indicator of Josan's Stockholm syndrome.
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