LJ Idol '22 Entry 1 - "Black Rainbow"

[banyangirl1832]

We had all heard the stories, of course, of the black rainbow fish who lived in the lake outside of town. Our abuelas exchanged tales in hushed voices over their afternoon canelas and cafecitos, just loud enough for us to hear, although they told our exhausted parents that we had spent that hour asleep in the little cot next to the couch. By we, I

Comments

[estelle]

To the adventures of childhood! Such a vivid fantasy.

[static_abyss]

You had me at "canelas and cafecitos." This was so much fun to read and reminded me of my childhood hunts when I went to visit my grandma in Mexico. I can't wait to read more of your stories.

[bleodswean]

*applauds* That was fantastic fun!! Such a great interpretation of the prompt! You did a great job telling the story and I was wildly entertained by it!

[viagra]

Ooh, this was really interesting! I was expecting all of the build-up to end with, "...and nothing happened," but I actually liked the way you did this much better. This is such a good telling of a young sibling "adventure" with the added bonus of the stories that started it actually being real. It's well-written fantasy with a very grounded side. Good work on this one! :)

[beautyofgrey]

Aha! What a fun adventure. I love Abuela Rosita's response.

[stellinasusan]

Loved the mixture of fantasy and reality I really enjoyed it and a clever take on the prompt ,good luck x