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[banburytales]

Title: Addison Road (4/5)
Author: soleta
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Orlando Bloom/Sean Bean
Summary: In which Orlando knows, once and for all.
AN: Yeah, it's only been... a month and a half? I am so sorry, people - it was unavoidable. I had incredible amounts of home life confusion and this chapter didn't really click for me until yesterday. As always, for autumnlecroix.

Comments

[bbblakey]

pardon me while I grammarwhore. *cough*

"He lied sluggishly in bed, eating, sleeping, and thinking."

Should be he lay, or even laid. Lied implies that he was in bed, uttering untruths;)

But apart from that minor nitpickiness, it's nice. Once again, your writing has a nice feel to it, that I can't describe. But I do like it:)

[banburytales]

shh. we're not talking about that! *shiftyeyes, fixes*

[bbblakey]

mwaha, I am teh win! *cough*

*kiss* love you, but am running away now~

[thalassatx]

Yay!! *bounce*

[1420]

I loved Dr. Bean's hesitation at the operating table-- really great suspense.

The tickle in the foot is a nice touch. Later someone would have to test Orlando for Babinski's sign-- in adults you want the toes to curl in when something pointed is dragged down the sole of the foot-- if the toes flare up, as they do in an infant to age 2, then you have a problem. I only mention it because while the directions are for a "pointed instrument" many nurses (and I'm guessing doctors, too, if they're as hands on as Bean) will use their thumbnail instead. Ah, human touch.

Looking forward to more.

[jenmstar]

Very nice. Glad to see more of this. *g*

[pecos]

Soleta, I'm really enjoying this story. Thank you for writing it and posting! Cheers!