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Fic: A Family Affair (3/3)

Feb 28, 2011 17:01

Title: A Family Affair
Fandom: the "Gallifrey" audio series
Rating: PG/gen
Length: 19424 words
Spoilers: set between 3.4 "Mindbomb" and 3.5 "Panacea", with no spoilers for series 4
Characters: Narvin, Leela, K9, Romana, OCs
Summary: my morepolitics entry for ficciones, whose prompt was "Leela and Narvin in something buddy-cop style. Preferably with hijinks" - it is ( Read more... )

doctor who, gallifrey, fic

Comments 16

ficciones February 28 2011, 19:46:04 UTC

“Aren’t you going to ask me whether I would have chosen death or treason?”

“No,” Leela said. “You are many things, Narvin, but not a coward.”

I would be quoting all over the place, but I am singling this out for reminding me of one of my favourite Leela & Narvin moments, when she complains about him not asking how she's doing and he retorts that he wouldn't insult her by asking.

Basically, I have never marked so quickly. I adored every bit of this. You wrote your OCs brilliently in a limited span, letting them have their light without overshadowing Leela and Narvin. I love how you did the relationship between them, and I gleed when you brought in Rodan. And then you put her with Romana and teamed them up with Eulidia (whose name kept making me think of Euclid, which is very appropriate) and that was just a delight. And you never made it easy or simple. You wrote Leela and Narvin wonderfully, and I like how you let their differences and similarities show them in their many facets ( ... )

bagheera_san February 28 2011, 23:28:40 UTC

That's one of my favourite Leela and Narvin moments, too. Well, all of S3 is, really. The best thing about this prompt was that it made me write a story I have been wanting to write for more than a year.

Rodan had to be in this from the moment I re-watched Invasion of Time, because... well, just because ;) Eulidia is actually a genus of colibri, because I despair over TL names and stared at weird words on wikipedia a lot, but Euclid is indeed a good association (WORD kept insisting on it, too) for a Time Lady.

aralias February 28 2011, 23:03:10 UTC

this is truly excellent - i hope you feel that now ( ... )

aralias February 28 2011, 23:06:44 UTC

also - on a niggly sort of note, the link at the end of part 2 takes you back to part 1, not on to part 3, and you're missing a lot of line returns - particularly at the beginning of this part. i wonder if it's something to do with track changes, in which case i am sorry. should be relatively easy to fix though.

bagheera_san February 28 2011, 23:17:44 UTC

Argh, yes, there's nothing I hate more than a lack of line returns in fic. It has something to do with my Word because this keeps happening - I should probably do something about the standard setting. Anyway, corrected it.

I knew something had to have gone wrong with those links...

bagheera_san February 28 2011, 23:12:26 UTC

Yes, I'm completely over my worries. Strangely, I was happy with this the moment it was posted. But without your pep talking I might never have gotten to that point :)

And I'm glad two people have now said nice things about OCs - I don't often introduce OCs in my fic, and never feel very confident about it, but this time I had fun with them. Eulidia I definitely pictured as a bit mad, or pretending to be a bit mad so people underestimate her. And someone has to miss Darkel, after all she wasn't always completely horrible.

janeturenne March 1 2011, 12:33:58 UTC

Not to put too fine a point on it, this is glorious. Romana's insecurities, K-9's smugness--Coordinator K-9, that has to be THE most perfect thing I never knew I wanted--Rodan, Narvin's mother, all of them fabulous. But of course, what this really is is a story about Leela and Narvin, and you've painted such a perfect picture of their interaction, their complicated friendship, their clashes of wills and the ways they work perfectly together. This was wonderfully plotty, and beautifully paced, and I really loved reading it. Well done you!

bagheera_san March 1 2011, 14:09:16 UTC

K9: more competent than you at everything, except babysitting.

I'm glad you liked it :)

agapi42 March 1 2011, 20:44:25 UTC

Narvin and Leela and Rodan and everyone. This is such a good story and fits wonderfully into canon. The voices are perfect, even with those who have just a few lines, and it made me laugh, and hurt.

bagheera_san March 1 2011, 21:44:16 UTC

Thank you! Making people laugh and hurt - a writer can't ask for more :)

so for some reason I'm a really slow reader this week neveralarch March 8 2011, 05:35:30 UTC

This is so awesome. I am still excited about the same things that I was excited about after part one (Coordinator K-9! Narvin and Leela almost but not quite relating to each other!) but there is so much more in the whole fic. I really like this Narvin, with his devotion to Gallifrey starting to become confused and his willingness to work around his president rather than have a confrontation. (Also, I loved every time Matthias showed up. He was so completely oblivious.)

And Rodan! I've just been watching her serial, and her voice was perfect. And I really - well, not liked, but I really thought Narvin's family was appropriate. And the epilogue was prefect. I was a little sad at the ending, even though it made sense, but the epilogue really made it hopeful.

Basically, all of this fic was amazing. Especially Coordinator K-9.

neveralarch November 15 2011, 04:12:55 UTC

I'm back! I listened to the podfic this weekend, as part of a really long roadtrip, and it reminded me that I really liked this fic. Actually, it reminded me that this was a fic, because I had actually forgotten that most of this isn't canon. Thanks for writing this and for giving the world Coordinator K-9.