"As unknown to them as the mysteries of Narnia."

[eyliena]

I think the thing that hurt my brain the most was that this author knew how to spell definitely and use your/you’re correctly...

I can't figure out how to spork since the whole thing wasn't awful, just random phrasing and spelling gone wrong, so I'm going to categorise the badness and let it spork itself. Quotes from the fic in bold.

Comments

[spae]

He instantly swallowed the woman in worry.

O_O I am now worrying. I don't *think* I am in any danger of swallowing someone, but you never know!

[eyliena]

Icon of win :D

[ze_zana]

I don't even know where to begin.

[lazilar]

The heavy sense of lose settled on their shoulders.
The heavy sense of fail settled on my shoulders when I read this.

bounce the tiny nurse
That sounds like a bad innuendo.

He saw it all in her faces
This conjures an image of Pavi from Repo. Very creepy.

the man’s palm swelled like a sisth
Sith lords swell the largest I hear.

Yay for self sporks!

[popsiclehands]

I feel like I just read some kind of weird SM guro fic.... My childhood has been raped far worse than it should have been. Also, Ami/Zoisite? really?