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House Sporkage. I needed some cheering up, and went to the pit to look for bad fics. I wasn't disappointed, of course. Also, it's been a while since I posted here, so if I do anything wrong, please feel free to let me know.
Power cut
Summary: There is a power cut at PPTH due to a heavy storm which results in a tornado. While everyone is surviving while two people are stuck in the elevators and noone knows. TragicRomance. HouseCam R&R Please. Chapter 12 up now! Fast update! please R&R.
Original text in bold. Also, sporking is rated PG-13 for language. Sorry for the TL;DR, I shortened it up as well as I could.
TITLE- POWER CUT.
SUMMARY- THE POWER AT PPTH IS CUT DUE TO A HEAVY STORM THINGS DON'T GET ANY BETTER WHEN TORNADO HAVE ENOUGH BACKUP POWER FOR THE MACHINES BUT NOT FOR THE ELEVATORS. EVERY ONE TRIES THEIR BEST TO SURVIVE WHILE TWO PEOPLE ARE STUCK IN THE ELEVATORS AND NOONE KNOWS. TRAGIC/ROMANCE. PLEASE R&R
First of all, STOP SCREAMING. Second of all, the tornado only has enough backup power for the machines? How did they learn to harvest the power of a tornado? That shit would be worth a Nobel prize, IMO.
"Abdominal pain, loss of appetite, vomitting after adominal pain begins, fever of 99° F to 102F, Painful urination and severe cramps."
"It's appendicitis," House said timidly.
House's shy? About a case nonetheless? WTF? Also, love the random capitalization of painful.
So she figured House was always right so she decided she should listen now rather than come back a couple of hours later with nothing still, which was when she was wondering where Foreman and Chase were, since they hadn't arrived yet.
To quote a review to this fic from March of last year: Every time you write a run-on sentence, a feather falls out of an angel's wings. I don't dare go outside for fear of being hit by the featherless angels that are falling like hail.
"Strep throat doctor?" the mother asked
"Yes, it's the inflammation of the tonsills which could lead to a potentially problematic situation concerning the heart, the worst case at the moment he will need to get his tonsills removed but that doesn't stop the strep it just lowers the chances."
"Oh, is there any way that this could be the reason for his father's death?"
"What did he die of?"
"Heart attack."
"Possibly then, so do we want to get him better?"
Sense is a good thing. This story doesn't have enough of it.
"Well, then sign these," he said handing her some papers, "To sum it up all it says is that you hold all the responsibility should anything happen to your son and you will allow us to give any necessary operations and medication to your son."
That's... not how patients get treated. Especially for strep throat. I'm pretty sure parents aren't responsible for their kids' treatment, and that's why doctors have to pay malpractice premiums.
For them the day couldn't get any worse the winds were stronger than ever, the storm was worsening, they thought there might be a tornado or something today.
Yes, because every thunderstorm in NJ has a high possibility of producing a tornado.
"I have my phone but it's flat, my pager is on the table in the conference room."
I hate it when my phone goes flat, and my soda goes dead.
Meanwhile House and Cameron were down in the elevator making love, because they decided it was now or never since they thought they weren't gonna make it anyway so any new life that was created inside Cameron it wouldn't matter because they both wouldn't be alive.
Sounds perfectly acceptable and rational. [/sarcasm]
They could both here the winds getting worse and worse but then all of a sudden they heard this huge smashing sound, the sound of windows smashing. they were both so worried that the firemen were just gonna accidentally drop the elevator dropping them to their death as they could feel the elevator dropping very slowly.
Honestly, I think the real House and Cameron would prefer death to the fate they'll have in this piece of shit story.
The plan was to get it down low enough, then let it drop naturally so noone will die but they may get hurt, that plan was going quite smoothly until the first blow from the tornado came, it had knocked everyone off their feet, terrifying them, but the worst thing when everyone fell down they accidentally released the elevator which went crashing down to the ground.
FIRST BLOW. Of the tornado.
The worst of the tornado was yet to come so the best place to be was down in the basement but they didn't know how they were going to save alot of patients from the fate of the tornado, the ones that could walk, could come down to the basement themselves, those in critical conditions, will need to be carefully brought down by every single staff member in the hospital.
Tornadoes travel. They don't stick around for hours, hitting the same place over and over again, just to be a plot device to a story. Also, change of tense FTL.
When finally she wole up but in great pain so the doctors hung a morphine drip from her gurney, taking off some of the pain from her.
I need some morphine to understand this story.
The hour had gone past and it got quieter and quieter up there, so Cuddy decided she was gonna go check it out, so with out telling anyone she went upstairs to see how things were, from what she could see the tornado was gone, so she walked a little further and saw that she was wrong, it was not over, there was another huge gust of wind coming towards the hospital and when it hit, it shattered a couple of windows by Cuddy, which frightened her, she could feel a stabbing pain in her back, and she knew she had a huge piece of glass stuck in her, she kept going until she was so close to the basement door when she slipped and fell on her stomach and there was nothing she could do, she glass was sticking through her back into her liver making internal bleeding from the liver.
"HELP!" she screamed, "HELP, I AM UP HERE, HELP ME!"
HAHAHAHAHAHA. Fickle tornado, hanging out and sending shards of glass towards Cuddy.
"The storm is not over yet James, it's worse than I feared, we only got enough food to last for tonight and tomorrow, some of our patients aren't gonna survive either," Cuddy said as she cried on his shoulder.
Man, this is one fucked-up tornado.
"Do it, please just get this thing out of me, I'd rather live in pain for a while then to die," she said, as Wilson nodded to the surgeon allowing him to do the surgery.
I'd rather be in pain than die. Seems pointless to live in pain and then die...
After a while of looking they gave her the options, she either had her leg amputated, had the rock removed and probably bleed to death, or have the rock removed and face a possibility of amputation anyway.
Wait, what? Are those two options, or three options? Maybe four? I don't know what's part of which option, and it's not like I can trust the commas.
Every day the doctors would check for any change in Cameron's symptom's. Her only symptom's at the moment were a coma but the doctor's decided to do a full body scan on her to see if they can determine why she has been out so long. So they took bloods and everything then went of for four and a half hours.
I think having more than one blood might be part of the problem.
She was now 6 months pregnant, House had kind of given up on Cameron waking up, he figured that the baby may be the only thing keeping Cameron alive and that once the baby was born then she would die.
Medically, that makes... no sense. Canonly, that makes even less sense.
"Check her pulse," Cuddy said to House as House moved round to the side of the bed and checked.
"It is normal," House said, "it appears that she is not dead yet."
I knew that medical degree would pay off some day.
House quickly whispered to Cuddy, "she has lost her short term memory and the better part of her long term memory, Karen is her younger sister she died in an accident 7 years ago," Cuddy nodded as she finally understood.
Yes, because this story didn't have enough cliches before.
Cameron didn't believe him so she lifted her shirt and had a look at her scars, "I can't have a child," Cameron said, "I am ony 17 years old and you look over 45," Cameron said a bit more calmer.
"You are 23 Allison," House said showing her her medical license.
IDC is this is in s1, s2, or s6, Cameron is not 23. And does House just carry her medical license in his wallet like a driver's license? Does a medical license actually show someone's age?
It looked as if Cameron was going to through another mental.
I'd hate to go to through another mental.
"I am so sorry House, time of death is 2:45 pm," Cuddy said as she saw tears start to roll down Houses face. The nurse slowly pulled the blanket over Cameron's head and Cuddy gave the family a look of sorrow which they knew immediately because they had seen it once before when Karen died in hospital. The mother was a mess, she broke down in tears, the whole family did.
A/N: Oh my gosh this chapter was so hard to write, lol. I was crying towards the end writing it, lol.
I was crying towards the end of reading it, but for different reasons, I think.
Cuddy quickly went to go help her but Cameron found that walking was painless. House thought that he better tell her about the caesarean that she had but she disappeared into the toilets before he could tell her.
She just came out of a coma after a freak tornado and a pregnancy, and she disappears into the toilets? SOMEONE SAVE HER.
"Seven months ago before you went into a coma you and I had a one time thing in the hospital elevator and do you really need me to explain how," House said giving her a little smirk.
"Not really, but how if I was in a coma for that long did it survive?" Cameron questioned.
The gods of fanfic saved it. Or, I don't know, she a uterus that's equipped to nurture and protect a baby without much help?
"I'm 23," she said.
"Allison, you are 31," House said.
Wait, so she was 23-going-on-17, now she's 31-going-on-23?
Cuddy decided she had no choice she had to hold Cameron down because otherwise she was going to rip her stitches out. So she pushes Cameron back and climbs on top off the bed, she does not rest any of her weight on Cameron as she knows that she is fragile the only thing she does is holds her arms down to the bed.
Cuddy was very uncomfortable with this position but Cameron seemed to be rather wnjoying it.
Now she's 31-going-on-5. Or this is turning into femmeslash.
"This is kind of hot, isn't it?" Cameron asked referring to Cuddy being on top of her.
Okay, femmeslash it is.
"Come on love, we're going to see our daughter, Allison Cameron House," House said to her.
"That is not my name House it's just Allison Cameron," Cameron replied looking at him a bit confused.
"No Allison Cameron House is our daughters name, I was afraid you were going to die, so I named her after you," House clarified.
Gee, now you see that was a stupid idea.
It has been a week since Cameron woke up, a week since Cameron gave birth to baby Allison Cameron House, which eventually after a couple of days they changed the name because it got a bit weird, the baby's name is now Rosalina Cameron House.
Now, if this was an A/N, I would've rolled my eyes but I would've understood. Except it's not, it's actually a paragraph IN the story.
He was worried because a coma was a symptom of so many things such as a brain tumor, which could mean cancer, Brain injury, Brain damage, head injury, so many things that he couldn't really test her for while she was in a coma.
... research. It's not a bad thing. And what's with the random capitalization of brain? Why couldn't they MRI her while she was in a coma? MAKE IT STOP!
The test was finally done and House had a quick look at it. He let out a sigh of....
A/N: Cliffhanger time, lol! You guys decide, a sigh of relief because she's clean of any cancer cells or a sigh of anger because she is infected with cancer and they don't know whether it will be treatable yet.
You guys decide all you have to do is review.
I thought this was a fanfic, not Choose Your Own Adventure.
Power cut
Summary: There is a power cut at PPTH due to a heavy storm which results in a tornado. While everyone is surviving while two people are stuck in the elevators and noone knows. TragicRomance. HouseCam R&R Please. Chapter 12 up now! Fast update! please R&R.
Original text in bold. Also, sporking is rated PG-13 for language. Sorry for the TL;DR, I shortened it up as well as I could.
TITLE- POWER CUT.
SUMMARY- THE POWER AT PPTH IS CUT DUE TO A HEAVY STORM THINGS DON'T GET ANY BETTER WHEN TORNADO HAVE ENOUGH BACKUP POWER FOR THE MACHINES BUT NOT FOR THE ELEVATORS. EVERY ONE TRIES THEIR BEST TO SURVIVE WHILE TWO PEOPLE ARE STUCK IN THE ELEVATORS AND NOONE KNOWS. TRAGIC/ROMANCE. PLEASE R&R
First of all, STOP SCREAMING. Second of all, the tornado only has enough backup power for the machines? How did they learn to harvest the power of a tornado? That shit would be worth a Nobel prize, IMO.
"Abdominal pain, loss of appetite, vomitting after adominal pain begins, fever of 99° F to 102F, Painful urination and severe cramps."
"It's appendicitis," House said timidly.
House's shy? About a case nonetheless? WTF? Also, love the random capitalization of painful.
So she figured House was always right so she decided she should listen now rather than come back a couple of hours later with nothing still, which was when she was wondering where Foreman and Chase were, since they hadn't arrived yet.
To quote a review to this fic from March of last year: Every time you write a run-on sentence, a feather falls out of an angel's wings. I don't dare go outside for fear of being hit by the featherless angels that are falling like hail.
"Strep throat doctor?" the mother asked
"Yes, it's the inflammation of the tonsills which could lead to a potentially problematic situation concerning the heart, the worst case at the moment he will need to get his tonsills removed but that doesn't stop the strep it just lowers the chances."
"Oh, is there any way that this could be the reason for his father's death?"
"What did he die of?"
"Heart attack."
"Possibly then, so do we want to get him better?"
Sense is a good thing. This story doesn't have enough of it.
"Well, then sign these," he said handing her some papers, "To sum it up all it says is that you hold all the responsibility should anything happen to your son and you will allow us to give any necessary operations and medication to your son."
That's... not how patients get treated. Especially for strep throat. I'm pretty sure parents aren't responsible for their kids' treatment, and that's why doctors have to pay malpractice premiums.
For them the day couldn't get any worse the winds were stronger than ever, the storm was worsening, they thought there might be a tornado or something today.
Yes, because every thunderstorm in NJ has a high possibility of producing a tornado.
"I have my phone but it's flat, my pager is on the table in the conference room."
I hate it when my phone goes flat, and my soda goes dead.
Meanwhile House and Cameron were down in the elevator making love, because they decided it was now or never since they thought they weren't gonna make it anyway so any new life that was created inside Cameron it wouldn't matter because they both wouldn't be alive.
Sounds perfectly acceptable and rational. [/sarcasm]
They could both here the winds getting worse and worse but then all of a sudden they heard this huge smashing sound, the sound of windows smashing. they were both so worried that the firemen were just gonna accidentally drop the elevator dropping them to their death as they could feel the elevator dropping very slowly.
Honestly, I think the real House and Cameron would prefer death to the fate they'll have in this piece of shit story.
The plan was to get it down low enough, then let it drop naturally so noone will die but they may get hurt, that plan was going quite smoothly until the first blow from the tornado came, it had knocked everyone off their feet, terrifying them, but the worst thing when everyone fell down they accidentally released the elevator which went crashing down to the ground.
FIRST BLOW. Of the tornado.
The worst of the tornado was yet to come so the best place to be was down in the basement but they didn't know how they were going to save alot of patients from the fate of the tornado, the ones that could walk, could come down to the basement themselves, those in critical conditions, will need to be carefully brought down by every single staff member in the hospital.
Tornadoes travel. They don't stick around for hours, hitting the same place over and over again, just to be a plot device to a story. Also, change of tense FTL.
When finally she wole up but in great pain so the doctors hung a morphine drip from her gurney, taking off some of the pain from her.
I need some morphine to understand this story.
The hour had gone past and it got quieter and quieter up there, so Cuddy decided she was gonna go check it out, so with out telling anyone she went upstairs to see how things were, from what she could see the tornado was gone, so she walked a little further and saw that she was wrong, it was not over, there was another huge gust of wind coming towards the hospital and when it hit, it shattered a couple of windows by Cuddy, which frightened her, she could feel a stabbing pain in her back, and she knew she had a huge piece of glass stuck in her, she kept going until she was so close to the basement door when she slipped and fell on her stomach and there was nothing she could do, she glass was sticking through her back into her liver making internal bleeding from the liver.
"HELP!" she screamed, "HELP, I AM UP HERE, HELP ME!"
HAHAHAHAHAHA. Fickle tornado, hanging out and sending shards of glass towards Cuddy.
"The storm is not over yet James, it's worse than I feared, we only got enough food to last for tonight and tomorrow, some of our patients aren't gonna survive either," Cuddy said as she cried on his shoulder.
Man, this is one fucked-up tornado.
"Do it, please just get this thing out of me, I'd rather live in pain for a while then to die," she said, as Wilson nodded to the surgeon allowing him to do the surgery.
I'd rather be in pain than die. Seems pointless to live in pain and then die...
After a while of looking they gave her the options, she either had her leg amputated, had the rock removed and probably bleed to death, or have the rock removed and face a possibility of amputation anyway.
Wait, what? Are those two options, or three options? Maybe four? I don't know what's part of which option, and it's not like I can trust the commas.
Every day the doctors would check for any change in Cameron's symptom's. Her only symptom's at the moment were a coma but the doctor's decided to do a full body scan on her to see if they can determine why she has been out so long. So they took bloods and everything then went of for four and a half hours.
I think having more than one blood might be part of the problem.
She was now 6 months pregnant, House had kind of given up on Cameron waking up, he figured that the baby may be the only thing keeping Cameron alive and that once the baby was born then she would die.
Medically, that makes... no sense. Canonly, that makes even less sense.
"Check her pulse," Cuddy said to House as House moved round to the side of the bed and checked.
"It is normal," House said, "it appears that she is not dead yet."
I knew that medical degree would pay off some day.
House quickly whispered to Cuddy, "she has lost her short term memory and the better part of her long term memory, Karen is her younger sister she died in an accident 7 years ago," Cuddy nodded as she finally understood.
Yes, because this story didn't have enough cliches before.
Cameron didn't believe him so she lifted her shirt and had a look at her scars, "I can't have a child," Cameron said, "I am ony 17 years old and you look over 45," Cameron said a bit more calmer.
"You are 23 Allison," House said showing her her medical license.
IDC is this is in s1, s2, or s6, Cameron is not 23. And does House just carry her medical license in his wallet like a driver's license? Does a medical license actually show someone's age?
It looked as if Cameron was going to through another mental.
I'd hate to go to through another mental.
"I am so sorry House, time of death is 2:45 pm," Cuddy said as she saw tears start to roll down Houses face. The nurse slowly pulled the blanket over Cameron's head and Cuddy gave the family a look of sorrow which they knew immediately because they had seen it once before when Karen died in hospital. The mother was a mess, she broke down in tears, the whole family did.
A/N: Oh my gosh this chapter was so hard to write, lol. I was crying towards the end writing it, lol.
I was crying towards the end of reading it, but for different reasons, I think.
Cuddy quickly went to go help her but Cameron found that walking was painless. House thought that he better tell her about the caesarean that she had but she disappeared into the toilets before he could tell her.
She just came out of a coma after a freak tornado and a pregnancy, and she disappears into the toilets? SOMEONE SAVE HER.
"Seven months ago before you went into a coma you and I had a one time thing in the hospital elevator and do you really need me to explain how," House said giving her a little smirk.
"Not really, but how if I was in a coma for that long did it survive?" Cameron questioned.
The gods of fanfic saved it. Or, I don't know, she a uterus that's equipped to nurture and protect a baby without much help?
"I'm 23," she said.
"Allison, you are 31," House said.
Wait, so she was 23-going-on-17, now she's 31-going-on-23?
Cuddy decided she had no choice she had to hold Cameron down because otherwise she was going to rip her stitches out. So she pushes Cameron back and climbs on top off the bed, she does not rest any of her weight on Cameron as she knows that she is fragile the only thing she does is holds her arms down to the bed.
Cuddy was very uncomfortable with this position but Cameron seemed to be rather wnjoying it.
Now she's 31-going-on-5. Or this is turning into femmeslash.
"This is kind of hot, isn't it?" Cameron asked referring to Cuddy being on top of her.
Okay, femmeslash it is.
"Come on love, we're going to see our daughter, Allison Cameron House," House said to her.
"That is not my name House it's just Allison Cameron," Cameron replied looking at him a bit confused.
"No Allison Cameron House is our daughters name, I was afraid you were going to die, so I named her after you," House clarified.
Gee, now you see that was a stupid idea.
It has been a week since Cameron woke up, a week since Cameron gave birth to baby Allison Cameron House, which eventually after a couple of days they changed the name because it got a bit weird, the baby's name is now Rosalina Cameron House.
Now, if this was an A/N, I would've rolled my eyes but I would've understood. Except it's not, it's actually a paragraph IN the story.
He was worried because a coma was a symptom of so many things such as a brain tumor, which could mean cancer, Brain injury, Brain damage, head injury, so many things that he couldn't really test her for while she was in a coma.
... research. It's not a bad thing. And what's with the random capitalization of brain? Why couldn't they MRI her while she was in a coma? MAKE IT STOP!
The test was finally done and House had a quick look at it. He let out a sigh of....
A/N: Cliffhanger time, lol! You guys decide, a sigh of relief because she's clean of any cancer cells or a sigh of anger because she is infected with cancer and they don't know whether it will be treatable yet.
You guys decide all you have to do is review.
I thought this was a fanfic, not Choose Your Own Adventure.