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Table 5, Prompt 16 - Jeff Schafer

Jul 23, 2011 22:50

TITLE/PROMPT - The Dream/Jeff Schafer
AUTHOR - gloriafan
WORD COUNT - ~950
RATING - G
SUMMARY - Vanessa Pike is a dreamer...especially when it comes to Jeff.
LINK TO TABLE - Clicky!
AUTHOR'S NOTE - For lucida! Thanks to luxken27 for betaing!

( The Dream )

character: jordan pike, table 5, character: jeff schafer, character: vanessa pike, character: dee pike, pairing: jeff/vanessa, author: gloriafan, character: margo pike, prompt: jeff schafer

Comments 6

lucida July 24 2011, 14:25:21 UTC

Thanks for writing this for me!! That was sweet of you. ♥ And you must have known I like Jeff/Vanessa! There needs to be more of them. This was an interesting idea, and in-character for dreamy Vanessa. :) (Although if I had older brothers and they dragged my crush into the room while I was sleeping, I think I'd murder them, lolll. :P )

Also, this rhyme made me lol: “Mom, mom! I’m having a walk, I’m telling you this so no creeper will stalk!”

gloriafan July 24 2011, 17:02:29 UTC

You are very welcome! Thanks for coding ♥ Ugh, I know what you mean. I don't like anyone to see me when I'm not aware, lol.

I didn't have the rhyme in the original draft, but luxken27 recommended I rhyme a few of Vanessa's lines and I'm glad I did.

Glad you liked it!

luxken27 July 24 2011, 17:23:37 UTC

Aww, this turned out adorably! ♥ You've captured Vanessa quite nicely. I loved the rhyme - and the fact that he mother just replied like it was nothing, LOL. I like that she just went with the flow.

Nice job! =)

gloriafan July 24 2011, 17:34:10 UTC

Thanks!

jennigan July 24 2011, 19:23:23 UTC

Aw, this was great! Now do we see them on their first date?

gloriafan July 24 2011, 20:21:34 UTC

Maybe, I still need a story for my 'Vanessa Pike' prompt.