Comments | babydee1: Chlollie Fanfic: Just for Funsies, 2/3

babydee1

Chlollie Fanfic: Just for Funsies, 2/3

Feb 21, 2010 04:25

WHOA!!! :-O

Have I told you that you’re all awesome?! Look at all the lovely feedback I got already! And because I’m such a sleazy ho when it comes to comments, I’m not gonna hold back on y’all!

Here’s the second chapter. I had half a mind to withhold it until tomorrow, so I could get some “Oh, you evil cow! How could you stop it there?!?” ( Read more... )

chlollie, chloe, justforfunsies, nomination, series:funsiesseries, smallville, oliver, fanfic

Comments 39

calie15 February 21 2010, 03:41:16 UTC

Okay...so I love the description. I like to write smut, but it grades on my patience. But it's seems like you really put time into this and I love it. I mean to make it span three chapters, that is just great. Reply #1 ;)

babydee1 February 23 2010, 23:07:37 UTC

Thanks so much! Funny, though; I was incredibly shy to write smut at first, but it got easier with every story and now it just seems to write itself. :-)

calie15 February 21 2010, 03:45:36 UTC

Aaaaand. On another note I like how Oliver seemed a bit shocked on a few occasions. He caressed her hair without even realizing it, he didn't realize how good it would feel being with Chloe. I think even he was a bit shocked towards the end. And I love his thought process through the whole story. At times he was kind of sweet, even a bit funny, and well then just a man. And I like to how you've kind of swapped around the point of view. Can't wait for the third part. I stay up late. Just thought I'd mention that. Reply #2.

Crossing fingers for Oliver not to know what hit him at the end of chapter three.

babydee1 February 21 2010, 04:01:23 UTC

"Crossing fingers for Oliver not to know what hit him at the end of chapter three."

You, my dear Calie, are psychic! ;-)

I'm trying to post the last chapter, but the text window isn't loading for me properly. I have to keep refreshing the window and crossing my fingers!

Let's hope the next ten minutes or so will give us a positive result. :-)

Thanks for your reviews. I'll reply them properly tomorrow! :-)

calie15 February 21 2010, 03:56:51 UTC

BTW, you should post the second chapter as a separate entry on chlollie. That way everyone knows you posted it when they get their notifications. I had no idea until I scrolled down. That way you can get all your reviews. :)

babydee1 February 21 2010, 04:03:37 UTC

Good point. Thanks!

purple_moon123 February 21 2010, 04:20:49 UTC

*thud*

Can't form a sentence except on to chapter three!!!! ;)

babydee1 February 23 2010, 23:09:53 UTC

Speechlessness is good, babes! :-)

So happy you liked it!

dockfangirl February 21 2010, 04:35:28 UTC

"Should I stop?”

"On seeing the uncertain expression on her face, he caressed her thigh gently. “If I do anything you’re not comfortable with, just let me know, okay?” he said softly.

She nodded. “Okay.”

LOVE the tenderness between these two!

“No, no,” she said quickly. “It feels good. It’s…it’s nice.”

Nice? His technique must be slipping. He lowered his head to her again and kissed her intimately, slipping his tongue out to taste her. Chloe gasped and arched and he grinned against her, hoping that he’d banished the word ‘nice’ from her vocabulary - at least, as far as this was concerned."

You know, I love to unexpectedly laugh while reading steamy chapters, HILARIOUS!

SO, this was doubly hot! I actually think there's steam behind my ears. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, say you're posting part 3 tonight... PLEASE! Just thought I'd mention that I'll be up late, too!

dockfangirl February 21 2010, 04:38:11 UTC

Just wanted to add that you should do a new post for each chapter in the Chlollie comm. I wouldn't have known that the 2nd chapter had been posted if I hadn't gone back to re-read chapter 1, like I said I would. That way each chapter will be more visible, and more reviews for you!

babydee1 February 23 2010, 23:28:44 UTC

I suppose I could do that...I just didn't want to spam everyone's f-lists with six entries all relating to the same story.

What I guess I could do is link it as a prequel when I finally get around to posting the sequel. Yes, there will be a sequel. Yay! :-)

What can I say...those blondes inspire me!

babydee1 February 23 2010, 23:26:01 UTC

"LOVE the tenderness between these two!"

Isn't it just the sweetest? Something tells me they won't be able to have a no-strings relationship for very long. One of them, if not both of them, is going to slip and start feeling something more. :-)

"You know, I love to unexpectedly laugh while reading steamy chapters, HILARIOUS!"

Ha! I always think the word 'nice' when referring to hawt sexxorz is as inappropriate as using the word 'cute' to describe a man's, er...equipment. It just ain't right! ;-)

"SO, this was doubly hot! I actually think there's steam behind my ears."

Oops! Sorry!! LOL!!! :-D

"PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE, say you're posting part 3 tonight... PLEASE! Just thought I'd mention that I'll be up late, too!"

Your wish is my command! :-)

Thanks for all your lovely comments, hun!