Drabble: Between the Dark and Dark (YnM, Hisoka/Tsuzuki)

[b_hallward]

AN: Written for veleda_k. Part of the Winter Collection.

Between the Dark and DarkStrings of murders draw them north where snow lies on the ground like a white shroud, reflecting moonlight during long desperate nights

Comments

[lady_ganesh]

Wow.

[b_hallward]

Thanks!

[veleda_k]

Perhaps I have a bias, but I still think that this is the best one. There's so much being said here, with so few words. It's marvelous.

[p_zeitgeist]

You do have a bias. I love this one, for how much is said in its tiny space and for the soaring opening-out of vision in the third and fourth sentences: the leap from a single door to light, to the eternal hive-like buzz of fleeting life in motion, to the curve of the earth and light beyond it.

But my favorite is still mine. And not just because it's mine, either.

[b_hallward]

I find it interesting that this was the one most improved by the disciplining a drabble requires: a dizzying, telescoping leap was always the idea--counterpoint to the leap Hisoka can't bring himself to make--but the forced economy of a mere 100 words pushed me to be more radical, more extravagance and I think the results are better for it.

But then I always think radicalism and extravagance are a good idea.

[b_hallward]

Thanks! This was the problem-child of the group--persistently angsty and not really wanting to be exactly a drabble--but I'm gleefully pleased you liked it.

[wordsofastory]

I'm fascinated by this drabble, by the parallels in it: the blood stains and night versus white lights and morning; Hisoka not reaching out versus constant motion. It's angst, but such rich, delectable angst. Wonderful.

(Also, yes, I am going back and reading all these fics of yours I missed. And soon I will have watched the last episode of Merlin- just one more between me and finishing the season- and then I can read all of those stories too.)

[b_hallward]

For once, I was really pretty happy with this: the contrasts--death and life, stillness and motion--and the telescoping quality, which I wasn't sure would work. Thank you!

(Yay! Merlin is a silly show, granted, but there is some really good fic to be had. *g*)