Comments | azurejay: i said i had hope--i lied.

azurejay

i said i had hope--i lied.

May 11, 2009 13:25

Let's save the debrief.

Flashfic! For the bordellinos 48-hour challenge. I was prompted by tangleofthorns:

"You burnt the house you built for us,
You left me in the cold,
Wearing all of your hand-me-down clothes."
- The Gentlemen Callers, "Hand-Me-Down Songs"

Uh. This is vaguely RPFish? Idk, Pete Wentz. 563 words. PG for stylistic quirks and overuse of adjectives.

( i'll give you a match if you need it. )

(fic) snippet

Comments 5

mandysbitch May 11 2009, 23:32:57 UTC

OMG! *Applause! You did it! Someone completed a bordellino challenge! *Wipes tear from eye*

Also, fantastic fucking writing! Really - this 48 hour thing works for you. And I liked that it kind of crystallises at the end (or is that because I had no idea of the context? Hey - at least I know who Pete Wentz is). It starts out vague and poetic and becomes solid at the end. I love that!

Yay, you!

mandysbitch May 12 2009, 02:08:50 UTC

Also, don't forget to post to bordellinos so I prove that people actually do my challenges.

pene May 12 2009, 05:58:05 UTC

I know who Pete Wentz is... kinda. He wears eye makeup and I approve of eye makeup. And this is so appropriately emo!

I love this:

because you never, you only stole

also
because he just liked smiling at you

and

The silence he's going to carry

and the fierce ending.

gatefiction May 12 2009, 07:09:09 UTC

I don't know Pete Wentz but that doesn't matter, I liked this. Lovely use of second-person!

intl_princess May 13 2009, 01:23:15 UTC

gorgeous. i barely understand band fic, but i love this story! and that, at the end of the day, is what is so beautiful about the bordellinos.