Sonic - Masquerade (Sonadow)

[azure_sashes]

Well! Took me almost an entire year to finish this. XD Started this in March, but I had to fight depression during a lot the months, so that’s a bit of a setback. Not to mention this is also one of the most difficult fics I’ve ever written: I’ve seriously never had so much Writer’s Blocks on one fic before. :o I also had to rewrite the ending

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[chromegadget]

I just saw this on FFN and decided to come over here and see if it was posted, and...ta-da! XD

I love it, Puri. *_* At first I wasn't sure what to expect, but I ended up reading the entire thing and just...♥

IC and sweet as always. Hee, I love how you can tell who is who just from their dialogue, and the ending? Adorable. X3

[insanepurin]

I knew you'd be excited. X3 And from your icon, it looks like Sonic approves. ;D

[nejlbana]

Oh Puri, you always write really good Sonadows~ Very nice work on this, I like the idea of it all! It kept my eye to the very end.

[insanepurin]

Thank yoooou~ I should see if I could poke a masquerade into another one of my writings sometime. :)

[psychicninja]

*_*
Stop making me like Sonadow so much. <3 <3 <3

I was kinda confused by a few aspects of the story... you had a lot of potential characters mentioned at the beginning, and I found myself trying to keep track of people who really didn't matter to the plot. I later just reverted back to Sonic and Shadow. A' course. ^^

I get that the Red Death girl was sorta Maria, but I didn't get it when Shadow was saying that she wasn't real. And I got confused when Shadow said that Sonic was the only other person at the ball.

But as always, the pros outweigh the cons. Beautiful description, beautifully put, the interaction between characters are believable and cute, and the end made me happy inside. ^^ Great job Puri!

[insanepurin]

Because I'm evil. *cackles*

Potential character? What do you mean? Do you mean the specific people being dressed up and such? They were supposed to be background and description of the masquerade ball, so sorry if I messed ya up. ^^;;;

As for the Host, it was supposed to allude to Masque of Red Death: a mysterious visitor comes to the masquerade, and when they unmask him, they find nothing inside. Whereas in this fanfic, the Red Host is an illusion of Maria--a ghost, so to speak. So when Shadow tries to reach out for her, she disappears because it's an illusion tricking Shadow into thinking Maria was somehow still alive. Shadow refers to Sonic as a person he knows who WASN'T a ghost or illusion or trying to become someone--when he unmasked himself, he was the true blue hedgehog we know and love. Shadow could rely on him not to disappear like the others had.

*huggles* Thank you so much, Chase. ;D

[sphix]

Ah, very nice. Very visual! It was kind of confusing for a while, but it evened out in the end. The "he wished he didn't share his cookie" line was, by far, my favorite EVER. ;)

[insanepurin]

Hee, I'm glad you liked it, and I'm glad you liked the line. :) I smiled when I wrote it, and I'm sure Shadow was in very much denial, as always. ;D

[way_past_cool]

I agree that in parts this was a bit too confusing to read. I think the overuse of the "he or she" "his or her" element really slowed down the your writing. I understand that you wanted to stress that Shadow couldn't tell the gender, but the reader knew that the other Domino had to be Sonic, so I think for the sake of flow you could have gone with the generic "he". Also, like Chase mentioned, you seemed to introduce a lot of character and hinted at who they might be, but not enough to let us know who they really were, and I understand that you probably meant it to add to the mysterious quality of the masquerade, but from the reader's view it was a little frustrating, especially as the other characters didn't play any role in the plot. And lastly, the incorperation of Maria/the host character had me lost. It definitely became much easier to read at the end, almost to a point where the first half of the story doesn't match the last half. Sorry if that was too much crit. I did read the whole thing though, which is big for a not being a

[insanepurin]

Hmm, I'll keep that in mind next time I write something where we meet a disguised character of unknown gender. *nod* Not to mention it'll save my fingers a lotta trouble. ;D Like I said to Chase, I meant to use them as a means of background, and I may have been too specific on the characters themselves that they well... kinda came to life and then got pushed to the side before the sun could shine on 'em. ^^;;; I explained Maria to Chase here. I guess the second half DID become a little detached from the first, but only because I wanted to explain some of the mysteries surrounding the first half and to help wrap things up by the end.

Don't worry about it. You've mentioned quite a bit of pointers there, and I apologize humongously again for causing ya much strife. .______.;;; And hey, the fact I hooked ya long enough for a pair you don't care for much is always a bonus, and a sign I'm doing a good job and to keep up the good work. ;D ♥