Comments | azraelz_angel: FIC: Temptation to Sin

azraelz_angel

FIC: Temptation to Sin

Aug 20, 2007 12:51

TITLE: Temptation to Sin
AUTHOR: Demona aka azraelz_angel
FANDOM: Supernatural
PAIRING: John/Dean
RATING: NC17
WORD COUNT: ~1745
WARNINGS: Slash - Daddy!cest
SUMMARY: It’s been building for years, and when Dean finally gets John involved, John knows he should feel guilty, should feel dirty, bad, wrong, but he just can’t ( Read more... )

challenge: justthatdirty, warning: slash, character: dean winchester, pairing: john/dean, fiction, character: john winchester, fandom: supernatural, warning: wincest

Comments 31

realpestilence August 21 2007, 03:48:29 UTC

"Tell me I’m not wrong. Tell me you want this,” John breaths out, searching out the truth on Dean’s face."

You think? John comes across as a tad slow, here, with that statement.

I always appreciate consensual John/Dean-we need more of it!

azraelz_angel August 21 2007, 13:41:53 UTC

I debated for a long time as to whether to use dialogue at all in this piece. I decided that even though Dean was 21, John needed to ask, needed to have Dean vocalize his want - make it real - make it right.

Thanks for the review - I appreciate it! And yes, the world needs more consensual John/Dean.

insaneboingo August 21 2007, 08:57:00 UTC

Wonderfully done.

Rec'd cause I agree with mss_celestal it's nice to see a John/Dean that isn't filled with angst.

azraelz_angel August 21 2007, 13:59:34 UTC

*blushes* Thanks so much! I'm glad that I could write something non-angsty for your viewing pleasure. I'd like to write more - we'll see though!

kuhekabir August 21 2007, 13:46:22 UTC

Wow, I am very happy to see more people writing John/Dean fics because I love them. This was great. Thank you.

azraelz_angel August 21 2007, 14:33:14 UTC

Yay for more John/Dean fics. Honestly, I was a little intimidated to write this because all of the other John/Dean fics I've read have been wonderful and I had that whole 'I'm not worthy' thing going on. But yay for fic!

Thank you for reviewing!

kuhekabir August 21 2007, 14:46:36 UTC

No need to be intimitated...just write more...please :)

azraelz_angel August 21 2007, 20:20:02 UTC

*snicker* I will try!

avamclean August 21 2007, 17:11:00 UTC

*peaks from behind laptop* You wrote John/Dean!

And it was hot. *blushes* And now I feel kinda dirty liking this so much. *shakes head* I'm going to that special hell but damn if it's not worth it.

Thanks for sharing sweets!

azraelz_angel August 21 2007, 23:59:23 UTC

*huggles* Thanks so much for the review!

I know, faint now, but I truly did write John/Dean, and I even came up with the prompt and sex toy myself - *dies*.

Thank you, thank you. I'm glad that you thought it was hot. And yeah, I can understand where you are coming from with the whole dirty thing, but you aren't. I felt a little awkward writing it but then it just demanded to be written.

The Special Hell is going to be full of great people - just you wait and see!

phantomas August 21 2007, 21:41:54 UTC

Great John/Dean :)
I love that you keep it strictly in John's pov, and all we know about Dean is through John's eyes...and I like it that it takes years for John and Dean to get there, it takes years for Dean to break down his father, so to speak, to be so sure of himself and what he wants enough to offer it face to face, so to speak.

I really like that you were sparce with dialogue, I think it suits the mood of the story, and the dialogue you did use is perfect, first with the acknowledgement of consent, because John -as wrong as this is- would never force himself (at least, my idea of John, unless it's Dark!Possessed!AU!John or something:)

“Tell me I’m not wrong. Tell me you want this,” John breaths out, searching out the truth on Dean’s face.
“Thought you’d never figure it out,” Dean grumbles, his arms starting to shake from holding up his legs.Dean grumbles! That gives it such a touch, given the position and what he's been up to. *G ( ... )

azraelz_angel August 22 2007, 00:06:43 UTC

Aww hon, thanks so very much for all your help, and for taking the time to read this and write such a fantastic detailed review. You just made my heart flutter!

I'm glad that you liked the pov and pacing. It never even crossed my mind to write it in any other pov than John's. Perhaps the next one, but this one I wanted the awkwardness and cluelessness to be a bit part of the story. John's lack of understanding - and Dean's need to finally literally put himself before his father. Dean, for all his bravado, is constantly seeking his father's approval. And it would have taken Dean (imo) years to be able to come to full terms with his lust for his father, and then to be able to convince his dad to feel the same.

*high five* Because you so totally got the whole John's need for consent. And the need to have Dean vocalize his want. *grin*

And *high five again* because you read it right and got that there were many levels involved in John's "I don't want to hurt you." comment. :) And yes, Dean has the most faith I have ever seen ( ... )