Comments | ayumi_nb: Narnia Fic: "Horseback Riding"

ayumi_nb

Narnia Fic: "Horseback Riding"

Sep 15, 2008 00:43

A fic, this one is long... 5.000 or something words. And, to tell the truth, this one is the first Narnia fic I wrote, but I was waiting to find a beta who knows the fandom very well before posting it, and I found it! Yeah!

Title: "Horseback Riding"
Author: Me
Beta: hotfruits, thank you!
Rating: PG
Characters: Peter, Susan, Edmund, Lucy and OC
Pairing: ( Read more... )

ff: narnia - movie!verse, ship: peter/susan, ff: oneshots, character: edmund pevensie, ff: narnia - ga, character: peter pevensie, fandom: narnia, character: lucy pevensie, rating: pg, ff: narnia - lww, character: susan pevensie

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ayumi_nb September 16 2008, 17:50:56 UTC

Hehe, thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

lacrymosa_queen September 16 2008, 23:01:17 UTC

I loved this!! So simple and nice! (Although, I could've done without that annoying Prince, as I'm sure Peter and the rest of them could too, lol) Great story, as always

ayumi_nb September 17 2008, 02:04:53 UTC

Haha, yeah, the Prince was fun to write though, and it was suppose to be annoying, but not too much.

Anyway, thank for your comment, you people inspire me to write more!

nowthatsmint September 17 2008, 08:34:02 UTC

Very nice! i like i like, it's very subtle the susan/peter thing, personally i'm not a fan of toooo much incest but this was really good, it was very realistic and i could actually imagine this so well with the characters. Love it! Great job :)

ayumi_nb September 17 2008, 17:25:38 UTC

Yeah, well when I wrote this I had read a lot of fics with incest in them, but the thought of writing it was still a little bit irking to me.

And thank you for your comment!

ronniekins77 September 19 2008, 03:29:12 UTC

Oh, this was so wonderful, Ayumi! It's nice to see a longer fic from you. I've always wanted to see a piece about Peter and Susan horseback riding. I've always thought that out of the four Pevensies, she would be the least graceful on a horse and the last one to learn to ride properly. Great job!

“Um, excuse me, your majesties? Is something wrong with King Peter and the ever so lovely Queen Susan?”

This line made me laugh. Even though the Prince was in the background of this fic, he was so funny to me. ;)

ayumi_nb September 19 2008, 04:01:49 UTC

=D Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!

“Um, excuse me, your majesties? Is something wrong with King Peter and the ever so lovely Queen Susan?”

This line made me laugh. Even though the Prince was in the background of this fic, he was so funny to me. ;)

That line was one the first ones that came to my mind whe I wrote it. He was sopposed to be annoyingly funny, it was funny to write him.