Cookies, cookies for you all!!
Yeah, anyway, I'm working on a lot of fics, from a lot of fandoms (Digimon, Twilight, Narnia, Harry Potter, etc), but since I'm only progressing with the HP ones, I bring this little fragments from two fics I'm currently working on.
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Title: "A Matter of Names"
Rating: PG (this fragment)
Words: 1,083
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I noticed some typos. Do you normally want that sort of feedback? Let me know if you just want overall comments; if that's the case I won't nitpick next time.
the myriad of random-> you can omit the "of"
Ginny scowled at her, and then stormed off the local-> Two things here. 1) I think you mean "locale" and 2) It sounds a bit awkward; maybe something like "stormed off the scene" instead?
The following days where a pain-> were
It’s been a week, and Lavender and Parvati are yet-> have yet
And Ginny is still being a immature brat.-> an immature
On a more general note...
Her idea of a big happy family
Ha-ha. A big happy Weasley family. Ah canon! How you disappointed me!
Oh speak of the devil: One Big Happy Family… More like One Big Happy Weasley Family.I like the little reference to fandom there. It really ( ... )
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Also, since I only have some free time to write at night... well, I tend to overlook some things.
That said, thanks for your comment, fic/plot wise. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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