Some angst

[avonlea_dreamer]

Not entirely sure how I like it but I can't think of how to change it to make it better.
Written because I was thinking about how utterly moronic JKR is to think that Harry can go through what he has and come out of it unchanged. Some spoilers for DH, the deaths specifically. Warning: angst!

Comments

[utkari02]

This was beautiful. :)

[avidbeader]

This is excellent. I can understand what you mean about feeling it's not quite right...it took me several minutes to get into the flow of the story. But it's a story so very worth polishing into something great.

I think I'd make Ron a little more hesitant or fumbling for his words...he didn't quite sound like Ron, to be able to describe Harry's state so well.

The only other suggestion I can think of is to de-emphasize just a tad where Hermione's obsessing over how she should have known not to travel with her parents...or at least vary the phrasing here and there. It felt a touch repetitive.

But once she found Harry and started trying to break through his shell, it really took off and flowed very well to the end.

[sculder42]

Sniffle sniffle...just wow. Powerful and so Harry/Hermione. She is his anchor, and she does understand him better than anyone...even himself. (And I completely agree with what you said about JKR.)

I love HHr angst and you write it SO well. *applause*

Can't wait for the fluffy smut...which you also write SO well.

Happy Holidays!! HUGS!!

[maryjane_6707]

I love the idea of this fic. Harry has never known normal and how is he supposed to make like "normal" now? I love that Hermione is going to help him get there. Ginny could have never done this, because she liked the idea of Harry being special. Great story! I can't wait for your next!

[kudosirony]

I totally agree with you - Rowling just made everything seem like it went straight to fine again, and there's no way. There's no way Ginny could have given Harry the support he needed after the way - which is why I so vehemently disagree with the last book. This was a wonderful story. The beginning was a little awkward, but once they got to the woods, it flowed a lot better.