Not entirely sure how I like it but I can't think of how to change it to make it better.
Written because I was thinking about how utterly moronic JKR is to think that Harry can go through what he has and come out of it unchanged. Some spoilers for DH, the deaths specifically. Warning: angst!
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I think I'd make Ron a little more hesitant or fumbling for his words...he didn't quite sound like Ron, to be able to describe Harry's state so well.
The only other suggestion I can think of is to de-emphasize just a tad where Hermione's obsessing over how she should have known not to travel with her parents...or at least vary the phrasing here and there. It felt a touch repetitive.
But once she found Harry and started trying to break through his shell, it really took off and flowed very well to the end.
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I love HHr angst and you write it SO well. *applause*
Can't wait for the fluffy smut...which you also write SO well.
Happy Holidays!! HUGS!!
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