Yes! I've been so looking forward to this! Thanks you! This is just an excitement comment, lol. Will go back and do proper review once I've read, which I will be doing momentarily. ^_^
But can I just say, smut, especially smut written by you, is always very welcome. ;)
Stellar characterization, as always. I especially like how vivid a character Aggie is, even posthumously.
One little thing. This sentence: He hated to wake her but she would be more comfortable sleeping in her own bed, he knew, would wake up stiff if she slept here. It threw me off badly, having to re-read and parse it out. That almost never happens when I read your stories. Perhaps dividing it into two clearer sentences?
Thank you! One of my goals with this chapter was to see if I could make Aggie seem like a real character, even though we never meet her alive, so I'm glad you think I succeeded.
I wasn't a huge fan of that sentence either; I'll edit it somehow.
As usual, most excellent. This is some of the deepest characterization you've ever done, and I really like it. And they even admit they love each other, kiss, and don't leap into bed -- how novel! ;)
I've been looking forward to a new chapter of this wonderful story for a while. Thank you for updating.
Bittersweet, confession through griefs, but lovely. As always your narrations relayed THEIR emotions and feelings so beautiful that the readers could feel too. And I always prefer reading from HIS side to HERS.
Great chapter. I loved the comfortable teasing between Harry and Hermione. The way you used the stress of the situation to force Harry's admission of love was masterful. Keep writing!
I rather think a stressful situation is more likely to trigger an admission of love out of Harry, if only because he's not the most emotionally-open character, given to talking about his feelings. And I always imagine that for him, saying 'I love you' would be very difficult because of the way he grew up; the words mean a lot more to him and so would be hard to say unless he was absolutely certain-- or unless they just got blurted out by accident, as happened here.
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But can I just say, smut, especially smut written by you, is always very welcome. ;)
Thank you!
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One little thing. This sentence: He hated to wake her but she would be more comfortable sleeping in her own bed, he knew, would wake up stiff if she slept here. It threw me off badly, having to re-read and parse it out. That almost never happens when I read your stories. Perhaps dividing it into two clearer sentences?
Looking forward to more!
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I wasn't a huge fan of that sentence either; I'll edit it somehow.
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Bittersweet, confession through griefs, but lovely. As always your narrations relayed THEIR emotions and feelings so beautiful that the readers could feel too. And I always prefer reading from HIS side to HERS.
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I rather think a stressful situation is more likely to trigger an admission of love out of Harry, if only because he's not the most emotionally-open character, given to talking about his feelings. And I always imagine that for him, saying 'I love you' would be very difficult because of the way he grew up; the words mean a lot more to him and so would be hard to say unless he was absolutely certain-- or unless they just got blurted out by accident, as happened here.
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