ficlet (bsg): our empty rooms

[averita]

Title: Our Empty Rooms

Author: averita

Summary: They don’t talk much, these days, looking to books and the slide of skin to say what needs to be said.

A/N: You guys, I actually wrote fic! What is this? (400 words totally counts. It's been over a year and I'm very much in poetry mode at the moment.) This was written for adama_roslin's MOL, prompt "lonely". Spoilers

Comments

[defyingnormalcy]

When it comes to fanfic, I've always felt that it's quality over quantity. And this is certainly quality.

I particularly love this line: They don’t talk much, these days, looking to books and the slide of skin to say what needs to be said. It’s enough, he thinks, desperately. Words have only ever gotten them into trouble.

Well done! Excellent interpretation of the prompt.

[averita]

I appreciate it! I'm going to have to build my way back up to longer pieces, I think (soon, actually, because I have a 12 page fiction piece due soon - eeek) but sometimes shorter works better for me.

Thank you very much :)

[defyingnormalcy]

Good luck! I am in a similar boat - tons of papers due rather soon! Eeek! :P

[larsfarm77]

I love that you chose to write fic! I loved the bittersweet notes in this, with Laura trying to face things as fast as Bill is smoothing them over. There's something so moving in the fact that his Earth is her, he believes in her. It can never be a wasteland to him.

My favourite part is the same as defyingnormalcy's. So perfect.

Thanks for joining in the fun!

[averita]

Thank you, and thank you for organizing the MOL!

Laura trying to face things as fast as Bill is smoothing them over.

That was one of the themes that interested me so much in episodes like Six of One and Islanded in a Stream of Stars, and also depressed the hell out of me, so it was interesting to delve into a little bit. What can I say, I love the angst.

[hollywobbles]

Ooh, this is sad and lovely. Her (your) observation about Dee is such a good one, and one I hadn't thought about. When all is said and done, they all had so much blood on their hands -- so many fragile people and so much stumbling about and inadvertently landing in tragedy. :/

[averita]

The line about Dee is the first bit that I came up with, actually, so I'm glad you liked it! I love the character but I feel like Laura would have had really conflicting thouhgts about her.

I've just started rewatching the show and in many ways watching the miniseries again was so depressing for that reason - seeing characters like Dee and Gaeta and Tyrol fresh-faced and eager really hurt, knowing what was coming!

Thanks so much for commenting :)

[somadanne]

This is deep and beautiful and I'm so glad you wrote fic!

Like others, I loved this line:

They don’t talk much, these days, looking to books and the slide of skin to say what needs to be said.

That observation about Dee is something I'd never thought about either--and I like it so much.

And then the way he sees Earth in her and your ending "Earth is a wasteland" really pack such a sad wallop. Nicely done.

[averita]

Thank you very much!

[lindy999]

Wow what a way to come back!!!

[averita]

Thank you!