One-Shot: If Only

[avari_maethor]

Title: If Only
Author: avari_maethor
Summary: Never when he’s sober.
Rating: NC-17
Warning: Graphic m/m sex. Alcohol use. Slash. Jacob/Seth. Jacob/Edward (one-sided?). ANGST.
Disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by Stephenie Meyer. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended. Roughly

Comments

[herumtreiber]

It was hot!

I liked the gritty feeling and Seth's passion.

[avari_maethor]

:D I'm glad I was able to capture that feeling.

[starry_nights88]

I had to point this out, I just had to. It threw me for a loop and I just wanted you to know.

I should ask Jacob if he’s acquired any diseases since the last time he came to my room.

If Seth had cared about that, he would've asked before he had blown Jacob. You can get all kinds of fun STDs from oral sex and cumming isn't necessarily required to get things like herpes. - This is just me nit-picking, btw.

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That was the only actual note I had to give, but other than that. I really enjoyed the fic. I think you nailed the angst perfectly.

Jacob made Seth feel worthless, and I got that feeling exactly. I could feel Seth's love for Jacob, even though it was tortured. I felt him resisting, but unable to say 'no' because he just couldn't help himself.

And, lastly, I can't help but to hope that Edward and Jacob do eventually get over themselves and realize they had hard ons for each other and just get together.

Seth can meet Jasper and live happily ever after. It works. ;P

[avari_maethor]

I did have "But, since it had only been three days since the last time I didn't see the point" in there but my beta told me to take it out. -shrugs-

Other than that I'm glad I nailed the angst perfectly. Even though this was based on a scene in a book it was really hard to write.

I honestly hope so too. But I feel like it would be one of those things where Jasper would always be competing for Seth's love no matter how much like dirt Jacob treated him.

[starry_nights88]

It might've been better off left out completely, it just seems a little off. You would think a person, any person, would worry about STDs before they hop into bed with someone--anyone. I know Seth loves Jacob, but it's implied that he's a whore (Jacob, I mean) and if that's the case, Seth would know Jacob sleeps around and there's the possibility of contracting an STD.

Now that I think about it, if there was that danger, I would think Seth would ask Jacob to wear a condom too. Y'know? But the story's already written. No sense in changing it now. I just wanted to point that out.

[avari_maethor]

I think Jacob was to drunk to think about it. And as you said, Seth could get an STD from the blow job. I don't know many people who give blow jobs with a condom on.

[fairygodmother9]

Usually I'm all teamJacob. But with this one; you got me on Seth's side! Poor boy for being used like that.

[avari_maethor]

I don't think anyone can ever make me Team Jacob over Team Seth ever again. It'll take one hell of a story. Glad you enjoyed it! This is one of my faves.