Drabbles: Anya, Clem and Harmony

[aurey09]

These are my first three drabbles, so I'd really love to hear what anyone thinks.

Title: Introduction
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Clem
Word count: 100 
Number: 1/100

“I’m not evil!” Clem held his arms up as Spike moved towards him. He’d heard things. He wanted to stay alive.

“I am.”

“Hey, I know where there’s this really cool poker game

Comments

[sl_podcast]

ROTFL... I love the painstaking... awesome. Great job... all of them seem to capture the characters... I love Clem.

[aurey09]

I don't know where painstaking came from? - Angel's sense of humour kicked in. :-) I mock out of love.

I've not meet anyone who doesn't love Clem, except my mum, who frowns upon the whole kitten eating thing.

[desdemonaspace]

Drabbles are hard--to capture a "moment" in an economical 100 words. (I tend to go on and on--I should write more, & hone the skill of brevity, which I sorely lack.)

These are very good drabbles. These are also my three favorite minor characters, and ones I've never written (except for an evil Angelus once, a couple years ago.) You did a fine job nailing each one's voice.

[aurey09]

I like these characters too but then again I like most of Joss' characters. I'm going to be trying to write for as many different characters possible if I do any of these in the future.

I went on and on too and I think I should have come up with the title before the piece and given it a little more focus. Editing all these killed me. Thanks for taking the time to review.

[lorelei_frolick]

These are great. I like how you have Spike and Clem meet, and that Clem was the one who brought him in to the poker game. :)

The equal rights for vampires is hilarious.

My only suggestions are that I think Anya's would be stronger if it was entirely told from the first-person - you'd be able to make the most of her unique and amusing voice that way.

Also, the dialogue for Clem's drabble could use a bit more punctuation.

[aurey09]

I'm glad you liked them. I'm going to change Anya's to 1st person - I was wondering about it at the time.

I'll try and work on Clem's dialogue too - I'm not so good with the punctuation sometimes but I'll keep trying. :-)

[blueanddollsome]

These are good. I think the Harmony one's my favourite. I think of all of them it's the most tightly focused on the one idea (vampire rights) which makes it good. And, of course, big with the funny.

You've really got all of the characters down pat, which is what makes reading these so enjoyable.

Drabbles are hard. I always go over 100 words.

[aurey09]

Harmony's one was my favourite. I'm looking for a new job at the minuet and so that kind of thing will be waiting for me.

I had idea for a 100 drabbles challenge, all of them featuring a different Whedon 'verse characters. What do you think?

I was obsessed with everyone of them being exactly a 100 words.

[blueanddollsome]

That sounds like a good idea. It would force you to write at least a little from every character's POV. A good exercise.

[myfeetshowit]

Some people allow 250 and 500 word drabbles but the purist insists on 100 words. No more, no less.

Of course, you can write a drabble set or go for 369ers.

[shinodabear]

*applause for your first three drabbles*
They were very nice. LOVED the blood in the water coolers. . . or would they have to be water warmers? :)

[aurey09]

Thank you for reviewing. Yep, they'd have to rename them water warmers... or blood warmers, ewww.