The Fire of the Sun -- Chapter Six

[audreyii_fic]

Title: The Fire of the Sun
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: T
Characters: Full cast (Jacob/Bella, Sam/Emily)
Genre: Romance/Angst/Wolfpack!Humor
Warnings: Language, violence, and references to adult behavior. See here for more details.

Comments

[willow2883]

First off, I wish I had half the confidence that Jessica does. Oh Jessica, you are awesome!
Jacob and Bella watched "10 Things I Hate About You"! #Win!
The beach. The kiss. Bella's jittery leg from too much Coke. Everything that Jacob promised all those months ago, only better. Thanks to Bella's backpack. LOL
Mike. Oh Mike. You're the man!
There seriously need to be proms for grown-ups.
And Alice. That was wicked. Must be something really bad coming.

[audreyii_fic]

Jessica's got her own issues under there, but, yeah. She's got it goin' on and she knows it :)

Bella's jittery leg from too much Coke.

Glad you noticed ;)

Mike. Oh Mike. You're the man!

Kinda just want to give him a fistbump, don't you?

That was wicked. Must be something really bad coming.

By the pricking of my thumbs...

[rainey_lane]

Okay, I couldn't read this chapter and not give you a mini-review. This icon...it is perfectly you. Take that SM

[audreyii_fic]

Love the icon :D

Wondering how the night was going to go and when Jake was so sweet and confused, that's when my ovaries exploded (the imagery that creates makes me giggle).

*snorgles pre-Eclipse!Jacob*

Dear god, what the hell is this going to do to him. He is going to be frantic insane

What, you don't think he'll take it well?

(Plus maybe he will take it as your redemption)

He fucking BETTER.

I welcome the hiatus because I can give you my reviews.

Eeeeeee!!!! I can't wait :D (Especially because these chapters are so long and cover so much, sometimes I feel like there's nice but quiet parts that get lost in the shuffle; you always do a line-by-line so I'll know what you think of those bits!) Seriously, excited.

I shall enjoy my hiatus, I think :) By "hiatus" I of course mean "writing a bunch of other stuff I've been needing to work on", but still.

[stigmata_crow]

I have to tell you bb, I have been out of the J/B universe for a while so when I saw this I went, "Gurl, you cray cray. We're gonna be pulling you down from a fucking tower".

BUT IT'S SO GOOD.

Like too good. It's winning all the time, ALL DAY EVERYDAY, OF ALL TIME.

Loving Jake hard, just the way he likes it, holy balls Jessica is awesome, and seriously Emily? Seriously? Why you so cool?

Fuck the Cullens though. All of them. Especially fucking Carlisle for copping to his son's serious bullshit. They both can get stabbed in the cock.

And I have one fucking thing to say to Alice:

Oh.

By the way, bitch?

FUCK YOU.

Kudos to anyone and everyone who get's that reference.

Keep it up bb, so long as your hand is healing and you aren't going insane. I am not calling any crisis hotlines this time, sorry.

[dredhedred]

Oh, I'm enjoying imagining those fucking Cullens getting stabbed in the cock!

[audreyii_fic]

LOL! I'm glad you're having an easier time enjoying this one; the distinct lessening of Meyervoice has helped both myself and the readers, I think (though I'm sorry to say it's not totally gone, what with Bella still being Bella). In fact, my sanity's held up pretty well, aside from the general sort of writing troubles and frustrations that come with a WIP. My body, on the other hand... I'm banned from all sharp implements until I can prove to the husband that story karma's not gonna chop something off.

They both can get stabbed in the cock.

That was a horrifying image.

I don't know the reference, I'm sorry to say. Curses.

[bleviee_62vw]

... "Shoes?" Is that it? Also, every kudo I got (if I'm right) and then some back to you for thinking that Carlisle is a cop-out. He and Esme always felt a leeeetle too Stepford for me. But instead of stabbing him in the cock, can we just stab Edward twice? Once for Bella, once for Jake?

[lulu_honey]

*EPIC MOTHERFUCKING GASSSSP!!!!!*

(Like seriously. I couldn't actually breathe for a few seconds there.)

...

I have no words.

Okay, I'm lying. I have tons of words and here they are ...

That was perfect. And beautiful and funny and witty and sweet and romantic and hilarious and infuriating and scary and terrifying and horrific and ohmyGOD RUN BELLA RUN!!! It was like watching a wreck on the highway, everything was perfect and peaceful and nice so I was expecting it so go horribly wrong but I didn't think it would go *that* wrong. *wipes away a tear with a shaking hand, sniffles* I'll be okay.

I can't say why but the part about the tribal markings really struck a chord with me. It might have just been the baby!Jake'nBells but it might have also been about him sharing his culture with her in a cute, three-year-old way.

"That should have been our first kiss," he murmured.You made the line fit! *squeeeeee

[rawrtothefifth]

"Its like the Cullens are incapable of taking the time to explain shit to anyone that doesn't run on fucking vampire time."

I ALWAYS hated that! They'd be like we have to go and if Bella asked why it was like "No time to explain even though we could totally outrun whatever it is."

[lulu_honey]

we'd never seen each other naked

Was Jake naked on the beach in TMotE? You didn't mention if he was or not and I'm not sure if he would have taken the time to put shorts on if a vampire was holding his imprint by the back of the skull. Just wondering.

[audreyii_fic]

Poking head in from catching up on responses: Yeah, he was, but a) it was dark, and b) I don't think it really counted in Bella's mind. (For the record, she's also seen Paul and Sam naked, but probably wouldn't describe it in that way.) This was a continuity mistake of mine, but I probably would've just added an "not under normal circumstances, anyway" aside and gone from there.

[endeni]

Oh, what a cliff-hanger! Can't wait for more... ;)
/I know people think the whole mascara-and-cute-clothes thing plays into the oppression of the patriarchy, but that is such a second-wave mindset. There's nothing oppressive about wanting to look your best for someone you like. It's instinct. We just use The Gap instead of flashing our purple butts like baboons, you know?/ - This. So very much.
/"Bella, you own the 'Girl Next Door' look," Jessica said, looking proud of herself. "From flannel to fabulous in less than ten minutes. I'm awesome."/ LOL

[audreyii_fic]

This. So very much.

My third-wave feminist leanings decided to come out to play at the same time Jessica felt like showing her serious intelligence. So, yeah :) Jessica is Love.