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Ardhanarishvara Part Twenty-Three

Jan 19, 2007 02:12

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ratcreature January 19 2007, 01:51:48 UTC

Yay! A new part!

And poor John, it really came across how weary and exhausted s/he is. Well, the others too, but I felt worst for John.

auburnnothenna January 19 2007, 01:58:50 UTC

Oh, that's a great comment. We wanted John to seem so tired and wrung out that she was just inappropriately honest.

mecurtin January 19 2007, 02:06:12 UTC

Oh, *John*. So noble, so stressed, so not-thinking-things-through. So starting to lean toward Rodney again . . .

My love for this story continues to exceed the constraints of textual rendering.

auburnnothenna January 19 2007, 03:04:21 UTC

So noble, so stressed, so not-thinking-things-through. So starting to lean toward Rodney again . . .

So in for a shock. If I can only motivate myself into writing again. Good thing Mona poked at me today or this would still be languishing in revision hell.

boochicken January 19 2007, 03:08:20 UTC

Guys, guys... the last chapter killed me, and this one? Talk about your untenable situations -- they've stuck a hand in Heka and been bitten, and now they're about to jump in entirely. And now you've got me talking like Dan Rather and mixing my metaphors, unless Heka is a fetid pool filled with biting things. Which is actually pretty accurate, so I'm gonna stick with it. Brilliant, as always....

auburnnothenna January 19 2007, 03:13:00 UTC

Will John 'let's go in an smack some sense into them' Sheppard win or Elizabeth 'let's talk this to death' Weir prevail? Will John even care about the Hekans after the next chapter? Will we ever find out exactly what Novak and Cadman smuggle in from Earth.

In fact, getting you to sound like Dan Rather is an achievement. It means we've created a believable quagmire for them to muck around in.

krysalys January 28 2007, 07:16:26 UTC

It's more than a believable quagmire...

It's hella-scary. And very realistic. What comes out of your brains is awesome in its believability.
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amothea January 19 2007, 03:11:05 UTC

I loved this addition! The sense of chaos in the jumper bay and how tense and stressed out everyone is.

auburnnothenna January 19 2007, 03:16:06 UTC

Indeed. Everyone is being torn in various directions.

filenotch January 19 2007, 03:15:21 UTC

Plot, stress, parallels, symbols more subtle than a sledge hammer.

You two fucking rock.

auburnnothenna January 19 2007, 03:26:15 UTC

We try. In this case props have to go to our betas, who pulled us up from offering a too easy solution to the whole mess.