Destruction Where You Stand - chapter two

[auberus]

Chapter Two: That Cannot Sink or Cease

“On almost the incendiary eve
Of several near deaths,
When one at the great least of your best loved
And always known must leave
Lions and fires of his flying breath,
Of your immortal friends.”
-Dylan Thomas, Deaths and Entrances

Sirius wakes with a start, his face pressed into the open pages of the book in front

Comments

[jo_yumegari]

[blackxlupin]

One small detail: I had to copy/paste this into a text file, as the script on your LJ was too small for my eyes to be able to keep reading.

The second chapter certainly hasn't disappointed - I love your Phineas; he's such a Slytherin. I can't wait to see where you take this.

I don't know if spelling is a big issue for you, but just in case, I noted some typos: "supress," "supresses," and "supressed" in the scene with Moody, Dumbledore, and Phineas, and the repetition of "says." in the same scene.

[marauder_muse]

You're obviously brilliant and should replace Rowling, because clearly this is how it SHOULD have happened.

I can't wait to read more, though I'll have to, since I need to sleep. Definitely bookmarking this and continuing though. <3