Destruction Where You Stand

[auberus]

Chapter One: This Clearing In The Trees

“Where did he weep? Where did he sit him down
And sorrow, with his head between his knees?
Where said the Race of Man, "Here let me drown"?
"Here let me die of hunger"? - "let me freeze"?
By nightfall he has built another town:
This boiling pot, this clearing in the trees.”
    -Edna St. Vincent Millay

Sirius'

Comments

[oz_the_bobble]

I don't think I've ever actually read an AU where Sirius goes on the run... if I have, it obviously wasn't memorable.

This, however, I think, will be.

I love all the depth you've got to it... Like all the details about blood magic. Will be watching to see the story develop... Methinks you is very good.

*hits head to try and find Pratchett reference- 'come on, you've been reading him for six years'- but no. I'll blame it on lack of sleep*

thank you!

[auberus]

i'm glad you're enjoying it! the pratchett ref. is in there, i swear, though i will admit that it is both fleeting and obscure. if you want, i'll tell you where it is.
thanks again!

Re: thank you!

[oz_the_bobble]

*nods sheepishly* Please... it'll annoy me if I don't ever find it. Bet I end up hitting myself on the head for missing it... XD

Re: thank you!

[auberus]

it's very sideways -- but Pratchett mentions several time that the dead have no real emotions, as emotions are glandular. very silly on my part, i know, but i couldn't resist.

[serenity_ca4]

My this is quite good writing. Not just a good story, and a good idea, but some excellent writing, makes me think you might have some training :). The discriptions are well done, not too long, but enough to draw the reader (or at least me) into the environment of the story, and the pace seems just right too.

I am very much look forward to the next installment and hope you don't leave us waiting too long.

[konishi_zen]

*waves* Thanks for writing once again another part that just made my jaw drop in wonder and also with admiration at the sheer cleverness of the whole premise.

The magic that is being described is aweseome, since many people wouldn't touch on how Sirius would be able to tap into that side of his heritage.

I also like how Remus's powers are mentioned and the sheer urgency of the entire scenario. Great stuff.

And of course, thanks for the shout out and I'll be happy to beta anything in the future! Cheers!

[__sine]

I am totally hooked on this story, I have to admit; I am adoring your characterisation of Sirius (there was a line in one of the chapters, about the hollowness of grief that struck me as extremely real), and your attention to detail. Thank you for this!

[blackxlupin]

A well-written and promising first chapter. I'm fascinated.