DWYS - Chapter Thirteen

[auberus]

Chapter Thirteen: Through the Bones of the Living

The first sorrow of autumn
is the slow goodbye
Of the garden who stands so long in the evening -
A brown poppy head,
The stalk of a lily,
And still cannot go.

The second sorrow
Is the empty feet
Of a pheasant who hangs from a hook with his brothers.
The woodland of gold
Is folded in feathers
With its head

Comments

[serenenuit]

Still enjoying the story quite a bit and wishing for longer chapters. The pacing is moving along nicely.

Poor Petunia. Never thought I'd hear myself say that. As soon as I saw "white-blonde hair", I thought, "Oh crap. Things are going to go to hell now." How did Lucius manage the double appearance? Polyjuice? Are the witnesses lying? It wouldn't surprise me.

And a Weasley! Yay for Bill!

One small thing though. This part of one sentence, "It would be funny, Bill thinks distantly, if it he weren't so terrified... looks wonky to me. I read it as "It would be funny, Bill thinks distantly, if he weren't so terrified..." Hope that's the way you meant it.

Thank you for the update. I promise not to push next time. :P

[marauderswolf]

Ugh! Beta-person-me is smacking self for not finding that one in the first place! (Runs to check and see what else could have been missed.) And yes, I'm more responsible for the delay in posting than auberus is . . . I verify that she's been working hard on this story!

[auberus]

ack!

...runs to fix.

Thank you for the edit and for the comments! As for Lucius, I shall only say that he was not involved in the attack on the Dursleys; nor was he behind his own double appearance.

[stephanometra]

What happened to Chapter 12!? Is it just not tagged?

This is fabulous, and I'm going to keep up with it even though I really, really hate reading WIPs.

[auberus]

Chapter 12 is here: http://auberus.livejournal.com/16352.html#cutid1

Not sure why you missed it; I think I might have forgotten to tag it.

oops. sorry.

[loving4tomorrow]

Wow, this is the third time I've had to de-lurk for this fandom. I'd leave a rather eloquent comment saying how much I adore your writing and this piece, but I'm incapable of doing so, even though I do love this piece of writing and your style. I'm going to go retreat back to lurkdom now, and I hope you're able to update any time soon, I've been in serious need of good chaptered fics.

[auberus]

Thanks for de-lurking. I'm always glad to get feedback of any type, and positive feedback is of course the best of all.

I'm glad you're enjoying it.

[molsymo]

oh happy happy happy happy. i love that it's bill. all sorts of ideas are running through my head now... getting molly and arthur involved, peter the rat overhearing... i'm really excited about this new twist. can't wait for more.

[dr_schreaber]

yaaaaay I just finished reading up to this point :D! oh MAN what a great story! the characterizations are wonderful; I especially like Lucius and Narcissa, who are characters I usually despise. I like what you've done Phineas a lot as well :D ah, he's such a Black.

the original spells and potions and magical tidbits are just so amazing and creative. The part in an earlier chapter where sirius first went through the blood wards of the house still stands out in my mind :D. and AH! remus and sirius <3333 *fangirl flailing* I love how they keep getting interrupted by circumstance >:]. a part of me is screaming for them to just find a nice quiet broom closet and get on with it, but the rest of me is so, *so* glad you've drawn it out so much, and i kinda hope you keep torturing them (read: us) oh so slowly :3.

this story really distinguishes itself among the others that I've read, i think :D *swims around in AU plotty goodness* ahh, I can't wait to see what happens next!

[auberus]

Thank you!!! I'm so glad you're enjoying the fic -- I'm having a blast writing it, and it's good to know that it's appreciated!

Thanks also for the comment. Feedback makes my day, I kid you not.