Comments | atrata: FIC: People Who Know My Sins [Iron Man, Tony/Pepper, PG-13]

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FIC: People Who Know My Sins [Iron Man, Tony/Pepper, PG-13]

Jun 24, 2008 00:30

Title: People Who Know My Sins
Fandom: Iron Man
Pairing: Tony/Pepper
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Dancing is not in her job description, but neither is mopping up blood at 4 in the morning. She does it anyway.
Disclaimer: I am not Marvel. Really.
A/N: Is this fluff? Hmm, no, I guess not. Written to three titles from McSweeney's list of lists. I had them ( Read more... )

fic : iron man

Comments 95

destro June 24 2008, 05:56:36 UTC

Oh man. You've moved between the highs and lows of their relationship so well, and I love how Tony's reaction to her moving in isn't one you'd immediately expect, because sometimes he's self-aware enough to realize the reasons why, and he's a little ashamed of it. The tiny touches in this, from their easy camaraderie:

"Nah, I could take you," he says, and she leans into his chest until he groans.

...and how it can shift in a moment into something they can't quite bring themselves to vocalize:

"I'm not laughing," he says, and he's not, and this is bad. This is very, very bad.

And gah, the ending, the kind that's not quite happy (His resolve will last for three hours and 37 minutes.) but maybe good enough for now and jeez. Yes. Total awesome.

atrata June 24 2008, 06:46:46 UTC

*hands*

I am glad you liked it! I was not sure about a lot of things in this fic, including how he'd take her moving in (I keep seeing stories where he is totally okay with it, but I think he's not, really, but what the hell is he going to do?) and also the ending. So I am glad you called those things out as things that don't entirely suck.

In conclusion: OMG TONY AND PEPPER YOU KILL ME ALL THE TIME.

captain_elessar June 24 2008, 06:54:01 UTC

I really liked this. They have such an interesting relationship, which is a really obvious statement given how much everyone's been writing about it, but I really liked your take on it, and I liked the areas that you choose to focus on. (I also like your use of ballroom dance, but that's only because I'm a ballroom dancer :D) I think you had them both dead on. Well written.

atrata June 24 2008, 07:55:18 UTC

Thank you so much! I kind of love the idea of Tony knowing how to dance, actually, so I'm glad you liked my use of it. :)

captain_elessar June 24 2008, 08:03:03 UTC

Tony should totally know how to dance.

atrata June 24 2008, 08:10:55 UTC

... now I totally want fic about little!Tony learning how to dance. *flail*

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tyleet27 June 24 2008, 07:27:35 UTC

You wrote fic from Mcsweeney's. I think I'm in love. *pictures Tony at the superhero store in new york* Seriously, that is awesome. As is the fic itself, naturally--Pepper moving in without saying anything and Tony being angry about it, the dancing and the hands that almost wander, Pepper being angry and hurting him as she heals him up, Jarvis being totally sympathetic to Pepper, this exchange:

"Why isn't there stealth shielding on the suit?" She glues shut a small cut on his left pectoral, and then another below the arc reactor, a little to the right.

"Why are you wearing my clothes?" His thumb crawls under the too-large t-shirt, finds skin, sends heat up her spine.

Oh those two. Tit for tat, so frustratingly adorable. Excellent job, as usual!

atrata June 24 2008, 07:59:21 UTC

Thank you! I really like using McSweeney's for prompts, actually; there is always really good stuff. I have a list! No idea how far I'll get, but whatever. Been a while since I did it, so I'm glad you liked the results.

besyd June 24 2008, 07:38:27 UTC

Oh, crap! You made me cry! I was all good and gleeful and full of incredible, gushy feedback (because this - this is just so wonderful all the way around) ... and then you wrote the end and made me freaking cry (and become totally incapable of typing, omg).

And I was going to offer, because I've been meaning to for a while but am lame, to beta for you if you ever need another set of eyes, though you have extremely excellent betas already. I mean, I found one comma I would comment about, but that's because I'm totally a comma freak. So let me know if you ever need another look-see.

Pleasepleaseplease never stop writing them. Because it's so them with only a little extra them. So wonderfully executed.

And thank you! (Even - and maybe especially - for the tears.)

atrata June 24 2008, 08:03:21 UTC

Heh. You're welcome? I do not mean to make anyone cry, I swear. But I am glad you like the fic! I had a pretty good time writing this one.

And thanks for the beta offer. I'll definitely keep it in mind. In the meantime, though, I am absolutely dying to know which comma you're talking about. *grin*

besyd June 24 2008, 13:53:54 UTC

I do not mean to make anyone cry, I swear.

No no no! This is a good thing! Really. It's, like, the highest form of compliment.

(But if it'll make you feel better, look at what time I posted it - and now this - and keep in mind the annoying fact that I've been doing the two-step with a fortunately-temporary case of insomnia for the past, like, four weeks. Gah.)

(But don't dwell on that, because it doesn't detract from the fact that you elicited strong emotion from your audience. This is that good thing that I mentioned.)

In the meantime, though, I am absolutely dying to know which comma you're talking about.

Ahahaha!!! Check your email. :^)

And now a little of the feedback I couldn't manage last night.

He's smiling, eyes shining, all teasing.

Both of them are dead-on throughout, but I truly love your Tony details.

He screams, wounded and wrecked, and then throws his head back and laughs maniacally.

"Wow, okay,"

Did I mention your perfect Tony details?

He brings his right hand up to rest lightly on the crease of her hip, his ( ... )

atrata June 24 2008, 15:31:52 UTC

Thank you so much! I have such a clear picture of Tony in my head, and it does me good to hear that I've managed to convey some of it, and that it rings true for other people.

And yes, god, Pepper beating up on Tony. MY NOT-SO-SECRET KINK. I swear to god I will finish that story one of these days. The longer stories are such slow going, though, and for some reason I can churn out these short pieces of randomness pretty quickly, so. Gah, these two.

seren_ccd June 24 2008, 07:47:26 UTC

That was lovely! You really touched on every single difficult aspect of their 'relationship'. And how you managed to make a bleeding Tony sexy is just masterful. Wonderful voices and just spot on.

atrata June 24 2008, 08:09:59 UTC

Thank you so much! These two just kind of hit me where I live. Glad you enjoyed the story. :D