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athyestean

Grains of Golden Sand 2/?

Dec 11, 2006 21:39

Title: Grains of Golden Sand
Author: Ren Apple
Pairing: GaaSasu
Warning: Yaoi. Death. Mature Themes.
Rating: R
Word Length: 1740 words

Summary: He was ordered to betray the ones he loved most. Now, he must fight for what he has left.

A/N: I just rewrote chapter one, check it out. I will repeat myself, I am posting chapter three today or tonight after it ( Read more... )

gaasasu, naruto, ggs, fic

Comments 6

nayanroo December 12 2006, 08:15:26 UTC

Oooh, I do love this muchly. It's nothing I'd have ever thought of and it's ingenious--

And Gaara seems to be all right. I don't write him often, but from what I've seen he looks to be just fine in characterization.

athyestean December 12 2006, 21:53:09 UTC

Thanks, I am really trying to stay canon. Oh, I am so glad everyone likes this plot. This idea was like wham!, and it just would not leave me alone till I wrote it.

Now, I am kind of glad I did.

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athyestean December 13 2006, 21:31:14 UTC

*blushes* Oh you shouldn't have... Okay, maybe you should have. Lol. Thank you for giving me such praise I swear I will try to get out a new chapter in the next few days.

kina_chan December 15 2006, 01:08:09 UTC

Really good chappie! ^.^ Can't wait for the next one.

athyestean December 15 2006, 23:26:28 UTC

I know... I know... but writer's block, ne? It is like trying to squeeze blood out of a rock.

alydhe December 14 2008, 15:42:31 UTC

Hey, I know it's been a long while since you posted this but I thought I'd review anyway. This sounds really good and has a lot of potential. There is a mistake I've noticed in this chapter though.

You have Tsunade calling Gaara 'nii-chan' when it should be 'otouto'. Temari is older and 'nii-chan' means 'big brother'. Also, I'm not sure I can picture anyone calling Gaara '-chan' without my head exploding. ^__^