This is definately in it's raw form, I need to change the numbers to the corresponding names and fix some other things. Let me know what you think
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I am very interested and would like to read more. That is a good sign!
I feel like you're really hip with getting the whole picture of what's in your head onto paper (or internet). And there's a tendency to finish of with a lastlineofahaiku-ish closing to you descriptive paragraphs. i.e. "A shadow didn't stand a chance.", "I lowered my eyes." ... your dialogue is also convincing. Probably could be tightened up in a few spots, but really, please keep working on this idea! I am intrigued!
I am doing this for National Novel Writing Month, so it will at least be 175 pgs long, maybe more but not much. I am also working on another, which is 12 short stories intended as a kind of bedside reader, they are a little more adult orientated in nature if ya catch my drift.
Well that made my day right there, it really did. I am glad you like it. I will be writing non stop this weekend and I am hoping to get to the library before the end of each day so I can post the new stuff.
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That is a good sign!
I feel like you're really hip with getting the whole picture of what's in your head onto paper (or internet). And there's a tendency to finish of with a lastlineofahaiku-ish closing to you descriptive paragraphs. i.e. "A shadow didn't stand a chance.", "I lowered my eyes." ... your dialogue is also convincing. Probably could be tightened up in a few spots, but really, please keep working on this idea! I am intrigued!
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