Comments | astonish: i hear your sighs, i hear your heartbeat pounding on my back.

astonish

i hear your sighs, i hear your heartbeat pounding on my back.

Apr 24, 2006 00:25

title: treat your life like a tragedy
pairing: cristiano ronaldo/ruud van nistelrooy (cristiano ronaldo/other)
rating: nc-17
warnings: prostitution, mentioned violence.
notes: for mina_pak, who asked for something else and got this instead.

( ruud doesn't have much experience with this, clearly, but he thinks this boy is different from the others. )

cris/ruud, footie fic

Comments 28

thedevilchicken April 24 2006, 16:06:34 UTC

I'm only about halfway through this, and I can't read it now because I'm supposed to be finishing my goddamn dissertation right now, but I just want to tell you (in case I don't leave feedback later, which is entirely likely because I suck at actually doing that) - I'm really frustrated that I can't finish this now. I'm tearing myself away though I really don't want to and it's almost painful, I swear.

This may well be the best thing I've read in a long time. But I'd really just like to say that I very, very nearly didn't read any of this at all, and that's entirely because your header has no copital letters. And if there's anyone else out there who's as OMGWHEREAREYOURCAPS?!*skipsfic* as I am, you might be doing yourself an injustice there.

Anyway, I'll be back to read the rest of this later. So far, it's pretty much perfect.

thedevilchicken April 24 2006, 16:08:28 UTC

...and clearly I can't spell. Either that or I've invented a new type of letter, though I'm not sure what exactly a copital is. *facepalm*

mina_pak April 24 2006, 20:31:19 UTC

name: mina pak ( ... )

astonish April 24 2006, 22:04:29 UTC

boy, am i glad to see this comment. for some reason, before i posted this last night, i was reading over the end and freaking out about it. i don't know why, since it's exactly what i wanted it to be, it's the ending i thought up before i'd even started on the fic, but i don't know, i was worried you'd hate it. i thought maybe it was too overdramatic and i was trying too hard to make it what i wanted. so, yay, thank you for this comment ( ... )

mina_pak April 24 2006, 22:18:23 UTC

it wasn't overdramatic. :) i wanted to hate the ending though because it made me so sad but it's just impossible not to like it. it just fits so perfectly with the fic, in my opinion, so i'm extremely glad that you decided to go through with it. i've probably said this too many times before, but i just feel as if fics with substantial angst and/or endings such as this have a greater resonant impact with the reader.

variety is a very good thing. :) especially since i won't have to struggle not to cry.

i've had several ideas eat my brain which is why i'm so loopy. :P anyways, i understand what you mean and i'd be really excited to see it, if you ever get around to writing it.

i'm just so terrified of my ap tests. well, not english. but us history and human geography. ack. *bites nails* anyways, i've been working on fic and reviewing and finishing my homework intermittedly. the block i'm having isn't a block so much as me having so many ideas of directions this fic can take. i don't know which one to choose. :P

astonish April 24 2006, 22:43:36 UTC

good. :) i don't think i could have ended it any other way, really. i mean, if they had ended up together in the end, it would have been so cheesy and so unrealistic, not to mention really out of character for the way i was writing ronnie - though you wouldn't have been able to tell that in ruud's story. that's why i'm tempted to write it from the other side, since i think it would be a lot different ( ... )

colette_2000 April 25 2006, 03:05:42 UTC

*adds to memories*

Wow, just...wow.

That was really beautifully written. This paring isn't even my favourite but this fic is defineltely up there in my top 5 fics.

carla_g April 25 2006, 06:19:14 UTC

ah, i can't exactly say how much i love it. thank you - thank you - thank you! i love it though there is no happy-end! it's so beautifully written. characterisations, details, Ruud's feelings. the plot! everything is perfect!
just a brilliant fic. i'm so happy that you wrote R/R!
as far as i understood you had another one fic about them? *goes to read it* and i hope you don't mind that i've friended you)))

kniggit_slash April 27 2006, 02:32:46 UTC

I didn't get to comment on this when I first read it but I am here now. I think that counts. ;)

This...this was just good. And I loved the idea.

And if you ever think about doing a second part I would love it. I mean...I need a happy ending.

However, angst can be good also. Doesn't have to end good all the time. And you did the ending great.