Comments | arrowslinger: First time for everything (2/?)

arrowslinger

First time for everything (2/?)

May 23, 2009 22:27

Disclaimer: J.K. Rowling owns all of the Harry Potter universe.
Title: First time (2/?)
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hpmuse May 24 2009, 01:23:35 UTC

These two are delightful together. (I wanted to say delicious, but that may be taking it too far *wink*) Ah, the joys of being a man.

(UK comes back to self: Er... my imagination ran too far away that time.)

duck_or_rabbit May 24 2009, 22:51:24 UTC

Oh, I like this very much! I think you've captured the teenaged attraction between Remus and Sirius very well!

You ought to consider posting at remusxsirius

(The only tiny bit of concrit I have is with the line breaks. The formatting makes reading the text a little difficult and doesn't help the pacing. It's not a criticism of your writing in the least. If you'd like any html formating help for future fics -- not rich text, I'm no good at that -- let me know!)

arrowslinger May 28 2009, 22:34:57 UTC

Thanks for the review, its really useful. I'm going to post at that comm, I'd never heard of it before or I would have. Its provided me with lots of new fics to read so thanks for that. ;) And what in particular was up with the formatting? Just that there were no paragraphs? I didn't use word so thats probably why. Thanks!