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Trail of Dead [Code Geass, R]

Nov 08, 2009 23:25

Ah fuckit I'm posting this because I'm anxious about stuff and I'll just crosslink on the 13th. ;;

Trail of Dead
Code Geass // Suzaku/Lelouch, R
5471 words
A proper knight should practice mercy toward his enemies, which is harder than it sounds. Spoilers through R2.2. For springkink, which is a little dumb, considering how skewed the sex:not-sex ratio is. ( Read more... )

; springkink, fic, . code geass, : r

Comments 27

tenohikari November 13 2009, 08:03:13 UTC

::picks jaw up from off the floor:: wow, that was amazing and really nailed Suzaku from beginning to the end. I actually love the part where motherly Cecil drags Schneizel into deciding if Suzaku should pilot in his condition. Although I was sad to hit the bottom of the screen, I love the ending the most where Suzaku is still haunted by Past-Lelouch/Zero to enjoy his time with the Now-Lelouch. Wonderful job!

grendelity November 14 2009, 00:38:32 UTC

*blush* Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it! I think Lloyd and Suzaku and Cecile are the best family ever. XD

c_e_j November 13 2009, 10:36:15 UTC

I think it's written just great. I like both the style and content, there is just enough angst and sex, and they both are not so important as Suzaku's feelings.
Thank you for this piece of writing.

grendelity November 14 2009, 00:40:37 UTC

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

frames_in_aria November 13 2009, 14:07:35 UTC

That was beautiful ♥ The angst, the ghost of the past, and the contemplation are somehow, show a perfect illustration of Suzaku. Thanks for writing it. It's been a while since I read such quality in a SuzaLulu fic.

grendelity November 14 2009, 00:40:14 UTC

Aw, thank you! I love them and how ridiculously messed up they are. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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grendelity November 14 2009, 00:39:40 UTC

Alkasdfj thank you! That is an awesome compliment and I'm sort of flailing over here. <333

sabonasi November 14 2009, 01:22:50 UTC

The fourth section with Suzaku, Lelouch, & Nunnally was initially confusing. It wasn't immediately clear that it was a flashback, which took me out of the story. Previously, the progression of events had been temporally linear. Otherwise, I quite liked it. ^_^

grendelity November 14 2009, 21:51:56 UTC

Well, I was aiming for it to be a bit jarring, but I can see how it would be a bit much. Regardless, thank you for reading! I appreciate the comment a lot.

sabonasi November 14 2009, 22:25:18 UTC

Actually, the jarring element was fine. It was just that I didn't immediately realize that it was a flashback. I think what threw me is that Nunnally first refers to Lelouch as "Brother". Since I didn't immediately realize it was a flashback, I figured Nunnally was talking about one of her many other brothers, which meant that my mind immediately got sidetracked trying to figure out who Nunnally was talking about instead of following the story. Having Nunnally say "Lelouch" instead of "Brother" would go a long way toward keeping the scene jarring without making it confusing.