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archraven1234

Hard Battles Part 2

Feb 03, 2010 19:48

CHAPTER TWO

Summary: Happiness never lasts, but that doesn’t mean Sam can’t fight for it.

Warnings : Some language - to be expected when Gene’s there

“I’m back, DI Williams. Xander is back.”

Sam could feel his heart beating fast in his chest, and he could hear, in perfect rhythm to his quick heartbeats, the unmistakable beats of a heart monitor.

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strainconductor February 3 2010, 20:26:22 UTC

I did enjoy it! Very much! I was bouncing up and down in my chair in happiness, this is getting so good! I can't wait to read more!

Truly I love where this is going <33 Please don't stop 8D!

archraven1234 February 5 2010, 23:16:24 UTC

Thank you - you're lovely!

rei17 February 3 2010, 20:29:40 UTC

Oh, I like it!
Ray showing a surprisingly sensitive side (for at least ten seconds!) and Sam being in danger (I hope? ;).
Great work! I can't wait for more.

archraven1234 February 5 2010, 23:21:50 UTC

Thanks! I know that there's more to Ray than is shown, but he is still a lovable "Neanderthal".

talkingtothesky February 3 2010, 20:35:14 UTC

I really like this. Especially the Sam & Gene fight. Your comic timing in that scene feels exactly like watching an episode. :)

archraven1234 February 5 2010, 23:22:30 UTC

Thank you! I'm not very good at writing fight scenes, so i hope it was okay. =]

neuralclone February 3 2010, 22:59:30 UTC

I love the way you had the team taking bets on how long it would take Sam and Gene to start throwing each other around the room. *EG*

I also love the confrontation at the end - and the whole "Xander" mystery. I'm looking foward to meeting DCI Wayne and his men in future installments too!

archraven1234 February 5 2010, 23:27:08 UTC

Thank you! =] I'm glad you liked it - I personally love Sam and Gene confrontations - there's so much frustrated chemistry.

fern_tree February 3 2010, 23:48:09 UTC

Oooooh! This is fantastic! my face lit up when I saw you'd posted a new chapter!

I loved Ray's little moment of concern. And the fight that went on in Gene's office- just describing the sounds at first worked so well :D

Can't wait for the next part! XD

archraven1234 February 5 2010, 23:29:31 UTC

My face lights up when I see you post a new picture! =]

Thanks, and I'm glad you like the fight scene - it was hard for me to write.