Fanfiction snippets, warning some of this is smut!

[arcanallama]

I have been trying my hand at this fanfiction thing, but I'm still not really confident on it.  I have a lot of trouble with punctuation and often make silly syntax mistakes.  Coupled with the additional problem that I was not really raised among people with the best English so sometimes my sentences are a bit awkward.  What I have posted here are

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[masterfulg]

I NEARLY WEEPED TO A MILLION YEARS, AND NEARLY DID SOMETHING ELSE ENTIRELY TO POWERPLAY. FURTHERMORE, "POTENT, PERHAPS OMNIPOTENT PACKAGE" MAY VERY WELL BE THE HOMESTUCK FIC LINE OF THE YEAR

[arcanallama]

Thanks! Finally I got a comment! I don't get comments often so I will cherish this one!