A Canopy of Green: Chapter 3

[aquaseamage]

Here is the next chapter to my Norribeth story. This story is turning out to be a tad longer than I expected so this is NOT the final chapter: there will be more. :)  I have also used "Pirates of the Caribbean: The Complete Visual Guide" for reference while writing this, mainly for nautical terms dealing with various parts of the ship (ratlines,

Comments

[wicked_jade]

I haven't commented on the other chapters, but I really like this story so far. I like the image of a dissheveled James, worrying about what Gov. Swann will say while treking through the jungle. It makes me want to go on vacation.

I knew it had to be a brown recluse! *shudder* I live in Texas, so I'm familiar with them. My physics teacher in high school showed us pictures of recluse bites after his wife was bitten by one. As if I wasn't terrified by spiders already.

[aquaseamage]

I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I think James should get to go on some adventures, not just Jack and Will, don't you think? Of course, I suppose Elizabeth has to drag him along as he'd rather stay on his ship. I'm also enjoying adding bits of Jamaica's real wildlife to this story. More wildlife in the next chapter!

My neighbor's mother got bit by a brown recluse here in WI (probably arrived in someone's suitcase). A few years ago I was bit by a spider that made half my face go numb for a week. Think it was a ballooning black widow. It fell out of the sky and struck me on the face. It all happened really fast. *shudder* I'm not scared of spiders; I just look at them closely to identify what species they are if I see one. I see a lot of wolf and jumping ones during the summer.

[wicked_jade]

Oh yes, James definately deserves a few adventures of his own, especially ones outside his nature element. And I like the man vs. nature angle of this. Being a city girl through and through, nature is quite daunting to me. :)

I was bitten by some kind of spider when I was a kid. I'm pretty sure it happened when I was asleep; it was on my leg, and it turned reddish purple and swelled up like a baseball around the bite. I've gotten better over the years at not freaking out, but I still freeze up whenever I see a spider.

[aquaseamage]

Be assured James will have more adventure in the next chapter. Crawling about in a rain forest is outside his experience, as you say and requires different skills. I've always enjoyed the man vs nature books and movies. They can be very interesting if written/filmed correctly. A few movies that come to mind are "Jaws", "Quest for Fire", "Volcano", various ones about mountain climbing like "Into Thin Air". I've also seen some older or foreign movies set in the tropical environment that were very good

[flyingpigs_live]

I like this story. It's different than the usual fic, and I like how you're making the biggest threats be normal things like bugs and storms as opposed to the unrealistic, supernatural stuff like undead skeletons.

Good job. :)

[aquaseamage]

Thanks for the review. And I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I had fun researching Jamaica as well. Truthfully, I like supernatural stuff, too. But the odds of the same characters meeting supernatural stuff on a regular basis is against the odds. More adventure coming in the next chapter! :)

[divia1431]

"His white shirt was plastered to his body, almost becoming obscenely transparent.." <-- there is nothing obscene about this. It is a thing of beauty ;)

Love it! And I like your attention to detail. And I enjoyed James' struggle. Oh he knows he should be a gentleman, but he so doesnt want to be! I'm glad you wrote that.

[aquaseamage]

Thanks for the review. And yes, I *know* there is nothing obscene about it. It's the Regency rules and the story is written from James' viewpoint. It just wasn't proper for a man to show a woman his chest, certainly not an almost *bare* chest! Yes, he doesn't really want to be a gentleman but knows he should. I was trying to show he desires her and has emotions - yet he tries to hide it. He's being shy.

[cal_reflector]

A fantastic piece of work that goes far beyond the scope and depth of a fan fiction. I must say I was rather surprised at the lack of sexual tension (relatively speaking) in the story, which I suppose might have interfered with the idyllic imagery.

[ericadawn16]

Hehe, of course, Elizabeth would enjoy this...

Not sure why I didn't get around to reviews earlier, lazy I guess, but I do really like this one.