I liked the different chapters. Certainly I think the longer tale was more developed, however, re-reading these scenes was very pleasant.
I know you feel like your writing is not very good, however it is more riveting than I think you understand. Grammar is a lost art, so most readers will be unaware or even concerned if you feel the standards are up to your own. I would say this, if you are concerned about word count, you might look at economy of words and see if you can't bring the same sense of passion, same energy in fewer words. That's a difficult task, but for a writer, a worthy task.
That being said, I love the way you write the scenes. I think you do a great job of writing from the man's point of view, but it's clear that you are writing the sex scenes from Rouge's point of view. Perhaps because that is the vantage point from which you can relate.
Thank you for not only writing these things, but also sharing them. They've provided me much enjoyment as I've read them.
Well, I must say that I consider your writing something enjoyable to read, so I'm glad you write. You do well writing the porn. It's quite entertaining. :P
Any time you need help looking at something from a male point of view, you're welcome to pick my brain. :)
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I know you feel like your writing is not very good, however it is more riveting than I think you understand. Grammar is a lost art, so most readers will be unaware or even concerned if you feel the standards are up to your own. I would say this, if you are concerned about word count, you might look at economy of words and see if you can't bring the same sense of passion, same energy in fewer words. That's a difficult task, but for a writer, a worthy task.
That being said, I love the way you write the scenes. I think you do a great job of writing from the man's point of view, but it's clear that you are writing the sex scenes from Rouge's point of view. Perhaps because that is the vantage point from which you can relate.
Thank you for not only writing these things, but also sharing them. They've provided me much enjoyment as I've read them.
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Well, I must say that I consider your writing something enjoyable to read, so I'm glad you write. You do well writing the porn. It's quite entertaining. :P
Any time you need help looking at something from a male point of view, you're welcome to pick my brain. :)
You're welcome.
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thank you =p entertaining in a good way, I hope! =p
Guess I'll have to pick your brain sometime! =p
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