I don't have time to read through all of this now, but by glancing I'll make a few quick comments and get back to this later.
1: Rearrange any sentence with the word "me" in it. 2: Get rid of all passive sentences 3: You talk a lot about the museums in the region, but you talk little of the department and how their philosophy (methodology incl.) pairs little with yours. You do make a good case for your application, but it really just talks about the resources and not the education.
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1: Rearrange any sentence with the word "me" in it.
2: Get rid of all passive sentences
3: You talk a lot about the museums in the region, but you talk little of the department and how their philosophy (methodology incl.) pairs little with yours. You do make a good case for your application, but it really just talks about the resources and not the education.
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