SOP Draft - Social Psychology PhD

[socialpsychg]

It seems I'm a little late to the game. I just completed a (hopefully) presentable first draft of my SOP for a PhD in Social Psychology. I'd like to know what you guys think about it - any critiques, no matter how small or negligible (or large and broad), are much appreciated.

Thanks in advance!

EDIT: Thanks for all the help! SOP taken down. If you

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[socialpsychg]

Thanks for the advice!

I think I'll write a general paragraph in the beginning to replace my high school story. It'll probably discuss how the multiple research projects I've done have given me a unique opportunity to refine and be sure about my research interests.

I'll also make sure to talk about how each project I've worked on has molded my research interests in one way or another, and make sure there aren't any silly redundancies, as you mentioned.

Thanks for the help! Any further advice is appreciated.

[russian_bleu]

Great draft!

Two quick comments: The sentence that reads "...I am examining the effects of priming self-relevant female scientists on the implicit science beliefs, aspirations, and test performance of women." is clunky/unclear. What do you mean by "self-relevant female scientists?" Are you perhaps trying to say that you are priming Ps with images/words related to female scientists to activate that part of Ps identities? If so, you may want to re-word that sentence for clarity.

I would also recommend that you build out the "fit" paragraph more to say, specifically, how your research interests overlap or extend the work of Professor X.

It's developing nicely -- keep revising and good luck!