e.staal/skinner, "the slightest sign"

[chica_charlie]

Title: The Slightest Sign
Fandom: 'canes RPS
Pairing: Eric Staal/Jeff Skinner
Rating: PG
Words: 911
Summary: How it happens.
Note: An experiment with a narrative that I found interesting and decided to try, borrowed from standing_fic. Second person. Let me know what you think!

Comments

[vamm_goda]

I love the POV, and the way you handled it. You chose some really elegant phrases that work really well with the second person in particular, such as the pseudo orders like 'lean in'. It's almost more a call to action than a description, and that makes it really immediate and really nice to read. So awesome, I love it!

[chica_charlie]

Yay, I'm so happy to hear that it worked for you. Thank you! It was difficult, but fun to write. :)

[chica_charlie]

Haha I am as well, so you'll rarely find something without one in my fics. Thanks for reading!

[iloveyouchicago]

Love the POV!

[chica_charlie]

:) Thank you!

[ice_baby_09]

I love this POV! It's like an outside perspective, but still you're like in his head and it's so intimate :)

[chica_charlie]

That's what I like about it as well. Thank you!

[juliella]

EVERYTHING YOU WRITE IS PERFECT AND THIS IS NO EXCEPTION.

you already know i love this but i'll say it again because ugh, so jealous. jeff is perfect and flirty and way the tension just builds builds builds and then crescendos and there's a happy is ending is fhjkls;alkfjhklas;

♥

[chica_charlie]

YOU ARE TOO NICE.

♥