Then one day, when she woke up, her Love wasn’t breathing anymore, and her Beloved had his head buried in her Love’s shoulder, and he wasn’t breathing properly, but for a different reason than when he was little, and weak, and sickly, and no matter how she purred she couldn’t make him breathe any easier.
It was an interesting experience to write a story entirely from the point of view of a cat. Well, actually, this one was born when I was writing another, more light-hearted one from this kitty's point of view (which I probably will never finish), but I kept thinking of all the sad things she must have witnessed if she was around since Shizuka's childhood, and I had to write this.
This cat (who was named Hanako-chan by a very young Shizuka, btw ^___^) was born because every time I tried to picture Haruka, I'd always see him sitting somewhere sunny, and for some reason, a cat would sneak its way onto his lap. He so seems like a cat person... so I started to think what the cat would have thought of the events that were going on as Shizuka grew up. Shizuka's illness, Shizuka's recovery, Haruka's illness, his eventual death and Shizuka's reaction, which is precisely what is going on in this paragraph
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I have to say that the reason I was so taken with this fic was how it was written. It feels like it's from a cat's pov. Usualy with fics like this it's no different from reading from a human's view. Which removes the point of writing from that particular mind-set.
Also, Haruka DOES seem like a cat person, though I always figured I thought that because I was one. Hahaha.
Cats really are like that though. They know what your feeling even when you don't actualy physicaly show it. Their VERY in tune with your emotions.
Yup, I did put a lot of thought into it... that's exactly my problem: I tend to overthink everything, to the point where it blocks my inspiration and I can't put things to words. >_<
For every finished story you see here, there are at least five that were never completed. :P
I loved using such an unreliable narrator. It made things difficult (I couldn't use Haruka or Shizuka's name, for example) but some part of me loves a challenge. :)
No, both Doumekis seem like cat people. They're not loud, they can keep still for long periods of time, they make no sudden movements and are innately very kind... all qualities that cats love in people.
"The first time he tried to give Doumeki a handjob, he discovered that there was one other thing that needed warmth to rise properly. The startled yelp that escaped the lips of the otherwise impassive teenager when Watanuki’s hands found their target was extremely satisfying. The natural physiological reaction to having cold hands in contact with a very sensitive body part, was not quite. Turns out it wasn’t only bread dough that deflated pathetically when kneaded with freezing hands."
Actually, I can imagine fail!sex more easily than anything, between these two. Most people try to tack the experience on Doumeki because they think he would research it, or on Watanuki because of Yuuko, but to me they're just teen boys, and both are rather nerdy. Plus, I can't imagine that their sex education would be very good, especially for between males. My education of it (male sex) was just "prostate gland has g-spot, located through anal canal. Alright now, moving on" and my teacher was pretty liberal.
I can't make bread. Everything I know about it, I learned from "Yakitate!! Japan." Ah, cooking manga. xD
but to me they're just teen boys, and both are rather nerdy.
My point exactly!
Sex-ed in Japan stinks. It seems it focuses on the biological aspects, and little else. They tell girls about menstruation, boys about nightly discharges... and that's about it. Sometimes they may mention masturbation to boys to help them get rid of unwanted erections, but they don't even tell them what masturbation is. The rest, they have to figure out on their own... and with the amount of bad (and sometimes nearly surreal) pr0n going around in Japan, that's not a good thing. And they wonder why Japanese people have so little sex and have one of the lowest birthrates of the world... Apparently the government issued a book containing (horrible) pick-up lines in an attempt to help their people get laid a few years back. It's that bad. :P
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Take your time. You can pick as many as you like. ^^
Have there been no parts that made you go "where the heck did that come from?", or one paragraph that you just had to re-read before going on, because it was strange, or beautiful, or important to the plot? I know I have my favourite phrases and paragraphs that I look forward to when I'm re-reading and they make me want to get inside the author's head to find out how they came up with them.
Or just pick one at random. I put so much effort into everything I write that I'm likely to have something to say about just about everything. I could still probably quote whole paragraphs of "Dreams and Realities", after all that re-reading and re-writing. XD
(heck, I still remember whole chunks of the stories I used to write in Spanish, years and years ago. O_o)
Well, there's just so much I could quote. You have a nack for describing things beautifully, or managing to convey emotions so well, and you can create atmosphere for a fic with what seems like little ease. So which fic do I quote? I love all your stuff.
Well, you don't have to do it if you really can't; it's just for fun and shouldn't feel like a chore. I don't want to inconvenience you. After all, you've always been one of the first to comment and/or review my stories, and that's already more than enough for me. :3 *huggles*
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This cat (who was named Hanako-chan by a very young Shizuka, btw ^___^) was born because every time I tried to picture Haruka, I'd always see him sitting somewhere sunny, and for some reason, a cat would sneak its way onto his lap. He so seems like a cat person... so I started to think what the cat would have thought of the events that were going on as Shizuka grew up. Shizuka's illness, Shizuka's recovery, Haruka's illness, his eventual death and Shizuka's reaction, which is precisely what is going on in this paragraph ( ... )
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I have to say that the reason I was so taken with this fic was how it was written. It feels like it's from a cat's pov. Usualy with fics like this it's no different from reading from a human's view. Which removes the point of writing from that particular mind-set.
Also, Haruka DOES seem like a cat person, though I always figured I thought that because I was one. Hahaha.
Cats really are like that though. They know what your feeling even when you don't actualy physicaly show it. Their VERY in tune with your emotions.
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For every finished story you see here, there are at least five that were never completed. :P
I loved using such an unreliable narrator. It made things difficult (I couldn't use Haruka or Shizuka's name, for example) but some part of me loves a challenge. :)
No, both Doumekis seem like cat people. They're not loud, they can keep still for long periods of time, they make no sudden movements and are innately very kind... all qualities that cats love in people.
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Particularly that last line. P:
But hey, can I yoink this meme from you?
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I can't make bread. Everything I know about it, I learned from "Yakitate!! Japan." Ah, cooking manga. xD
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My point exactly!
Sex-ed in Japan stinks. It seems it focuses on the biological aspects, and little else. They tell girls about menstruation, boys about nightly discharges... and that's about it. Sometimes they may mention masturbation to boys to help them get rid of unwanted erections, but they don't even tell them what masturbation is. The rest, they have to figure out on their own... and with the amount of bad (and sometimes nearly surreal) pr0n going around in Japan, that's not a good thing. And they wonder why Japanese people have so little sex and have one of the lowest birthrates of the world... Apparently the government issued a book containing (horrible) pick-up lines in an attempt to help their people get laid a few years back. It's that bad. :P ( ... )
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Have there been no parts that made you go "where the heck did that come from?", or one paragraph that you just had to re-read before going on, because it was strange, or beautiful, or important to the plot? I know I have my favourite phrases and paragraphs that I look forward to when I'm re-reading and they make me want to get inside the author's head to find out how they came up with them.
Or just pick one at random. I put so much effort into everything I write that I'm likely to have something to say about just about everything. I could still probably quote whole paragraphs of "Dreams and Realities", after all that re-reading and re-writing. XD
(heck, I still remember whole chunks of the stories I used to write in Spanish, years and years ago. O_o)
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Hmm....*goes to re-read all your stuff*
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Well, you don't have to do it if you really can't; it's just for fun and shouldn't feel like a chore. I don't want to inconvenience you. After all, you've always been one of the first to comment and/or review my stories, and that's already more than enough for me. :3 *huggles*
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