[Satsugen]

Dec 29, 2006 16:20

TELLING LE PING
by svz_insanity

[Satsugen] Telling Le Ping )

sub: svz_insanity, round 002

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qem_chibati January 3 2007, 04:53:19 UTC
Hee! This is pretty adorable and very amusing!

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svz_insanity January 15 2007, 03:39:08 UTC
I'm glad you liked it! ♥♥♥ Thank you. :D

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anonymous January 5 2007, 04:00:29 UTC
This is adorable! Especially the line "kill him until he's dead." Envisioning that coming from our Isumi-san is just <3<3 lots of love!

I'm a little confused by one thing: did you intend the repeated "qing" to mean the same as it would have in English? Because if you say "qing" in Chinese without a request following, it's usually used when you're inviting someone to step through the door ahead of you, or holding a chair out and inviting them to sit, etc.

To get a more pleading, semi-coherent effect, maybe something like "qiu qiu ni" would work better? I don't profess to be an expert on bedroom Chinese though :)

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svz_insanity January 15 2007, 03:42:34 UTC
Surely, Isumi should take that as a sign that he's been hanging around Waya and Hikaru too much. :D

*blushes furiously* Thanks for pointing that out. That was a mistake on my part- I asked my mother (er, minus the context because-- awkward) and she told me "qing". I looked around on google and thought it was right and I checked with a couple of my friends on my flist but I think the context was sort of vital and hence my error. I'll correct it on my final draft and I think I'll remember not to make the same mistake again. XD

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ungalad January 5 2007, 23:38:25 UTC
Aaaaawe, thank you so much for this fic!!! *bows*. This is great, though I too think Yang Hai has already been in Tokyo... but whatever, it really is a nice piece! thanks for sharing ♥~!!!

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svz_insanity January 15 2007, 03:44:04 UTC
Aww, I'm glad you liked it so much! Haha-- yeah, I was dumb. I hadn't watched the Hokuto Cup for over year and I didn't remember. I'm going to make an excuse on Yang Hai's part and say that he didn't get to *see* Tokyo on his previous visit because it was strictly Go-related.... or something.

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anonymous January 10 2007, 05:12:33 UTC
Damn good fic, and fun too. =D but as someone mentioned above, there are a few variations of 'please' in chinese. Qing isn't really suitable here, and draws me out of the fic a little.

Qing is used as said above, and also in a sentence when you're inviting someone to do something, like, please wait for a little while, this way please, etc.

For the begging type of please, 'qiu qiu ni' and 'bai tuo' would be more appropriate. ;) (egads, I'm teaching pornish chinese... -.-''')

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svz_insanity January 15 2007, 03:48:23 UTC
*blushes* I'm mortified by that mistake. XD I speak Cantonese and while writing this fic it occurred to me that while I know how to say "thank you" in Mandarin, I never knew how to say "please". *fails*

I suppose asking my mother how one would say "please" in a begging fashion after one's lover is giving them a handjob of a lifetime would prove to be awkward to say the least.

I'll rectify my mistake for the final. Thank you!

(It's better than having me download Chinese porn and finding out that way, right? :D So, you did society and me young, highly impressionable mind a favor.)

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arccie January 14 2007, 04:55:36 UTC
...I have just discovered a desire for Yang-hai/Isumi fics.
Oh gosh this was wonderful.
Loved it.
XD

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svz_insanity January 15 2007, 03:49:07 UTC
Haha, evidently, my job here is done. :D :D I hope you find some! (And if you do, pleasepleaseplease share!)

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