Huh? This felt like there was going to be more that happened to Ochi, but suddenly got cut off. It's a pity, because it's a really interesting take on Ochi and the way he regards other Go players.
I agree with Issen. This feels incomplete. You also also have some tense issues slipping back and forth between present and past tense. This had some good points, but it ends really abruptly.
I actually liked the way it ended. The story is mostly Ochi's experience of his life. Life has an open ending, so that fit well here, I think. And Ochi has so many issues, his life may just be too short for him to thaw out!
But seriously, I like this piece as a slice of Ochi's life. He's a very interesting character to read about and I enjoyed the way this story gave us a possible version of how Ochi might have fared after the end of the manga.
Wow, poor Ochi: you portray him with a deep self-awareness, but this full awareness of what he desires is crippled by familial and societal expectations. I love his inner voice: They’re not the clothes Ochi wants to wear deep inside. But they usually contain an element of the clothes he wishes he could wear, that darkly amuse him with reminders of the things he can’t have. Ochi will never be pretty, and if given the opportunity, he would never wear the clothes that he thinks about, because they would never suit him.
He knows "what is expected" -- only "pretty people can wear this" and only "women can do this" -- so I'm glad he's able to find an outlet where that sort of expression is allowed and he won't be ostracized. The parallel with Waya also being repressed and being denied what he desires makes for a real odd couple in terms of friendship (or whatever we can call their relationship). But it works. Ochi might think someone like Waya (attractive, more socially adept) would have everything go just fine for him, but even one "
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But seriously, I like this piece as a slice of Ochi's life. He's a very interesting character to read about and I enjoyed the way this story gave us a possible version of how Ochi might have fared after the end of the manga.
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They’re not the clothes Ochi wants to wear deep inside. But they usually contain an element of the clothes he wishes he could wear, that darkly amuse him with reminders of the things he can’t have. Ochi will never be pretty, and if given the opportunity, he would never wear the clothes that he thinks about, because they would never suit him.
He knows "what is expected" -- only "pretty people can wear this" and only "women can do this" -- so I'm glad he's able to find an outlet where that sort of expression is allowed and he won't be ostracized. The parallel with Waya also being repressed and being denied what he desires makes for a real odd couple in terms of friendship (or whatever we can call their relationship). But it works. Ochi might think someone like Waya (attractive, more socially adept) would have everything go just fine for him, but even one " ( ... )
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