Interesting. I needed to take my time reading this one, because it's concept is quite complicated and some of the stylistic choices didn't quite work for me, but overall I liked this - with the way it explores time and how Hikaru's changed the world.
I'm afraid I lost my scene spacers when I converted it to LJ compatible tags and I didn't spot it in time. So that doesn't help the readability any, I know.
There were a few choices I had to make when writing this, to prevent it from becoming a 100k fic. ;-) And then not getting finished at all. :-(
But, apart from still wanting to write out a whole bunch of the scenes that I ended up glossing over, I do feel the story plot is all there.
I was fun to write, even though keeping two time lines and Sai's backstory in my head all at the same time gave my a bit of a headache!
I know the the plot is complicated. I had to go back and re-do a bunch of scenes, 'cause I'd messed up on the new or the old time line, urg! And yeah; it turned out just a little bit longer than I had planned (like 3 times longer, triple urg!)
Overall, very enjoyable. I was impressed with Hikaru's dedication at getting Sai back -- he literally hooked up with a crackpot genius scientist in order to go back in time and kidnap Sai. Interestingly, that part didn't seem too jarring (despite HnG's overall "slice of life" feel), because of the detail about how inexact it was, the expense involved, the planning etc. (kinda reminded me a little about StarGate). I also grew to like Kanzuo-sensei through his phone calls with Hikaru -- I felt that despite the difficult situation Hikaru had placed him in, he understood Hikaru's drive
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-Murray
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I'm afraid I lost my scene spacers when I converted it to LJ compatible tags and I didn't spot it in time. So that doesn't help the readability any, I know.
There were a few choices I had to make when writing this, to prevent it from becoming a 100k fic. ;-) And then not getting finished at all. :-(
But, apart from still wanting to write out a whole bunch of the scenes that I ended up glossing over, I do feel the story plot is all there.
I was fun to write, even though keeping two time lines and Sai's backstory in my head all at the same time gave my a bit of a headache!
- Glasser
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Short description of a very long fic.
But right on the money!
- Glasser
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I know the the plot is complicated. I had to go back and re-do a bunch of scenes, 'cause I'd messed up on the new or the old time line, urg! And yeah; it turned out just a little bit longer than I had planned (like 3 times longer, triple urg!)
Glad you stuck with it though!
- Glasser
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It was fun to write, if a bit longer than planned ;-)
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