Hee, I like the way you convey the "foreignness" of Bond, that works really well. And the story feels like an exciting chapter of a bigger story! Which leaves me wanting to read the rest, of course, but I like the glimpse I get. ^^
I see what you were trying to do with the backwards spelling of Bond's speech, but I'm not sure I understand why you went that route with it. It's... a little distracting. That being said, though, the plot's got some interesting ideas in it, and I'd rather like to see more of the background universe this fits in.
Now that the guessing is over, I can comment about the comments. Yeay!
One of the the reason I fiddled with Bond's speech is because of the max word count. This one is exactly 1000 words. The first story I wrote had 1250 words and I could not strike a single word of it. So for the next one i created a little room by not having to repeat Bonds words by the translator while still making it clear that there was no way Hikaru could understand what was said. It was an experiment, with mixed results, it appears....
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One of the the reason I fiddled with Bond's speech is because of the max word count. This one is exactly 1000 words.
The first story I wrote had 1250 words and I could not strike a single word of it. So for the next one i created a little room by not having to repeat Bonds words by the translator while still making it clear that there was no way Hikaru could understand what was said. It was an experiment, with mixed results, it appears....
I'm glad you liked it!
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