"You get attacked by an Ithsic demon," says Angel.
"I get attacked by a Lisp demon!"
This made me laugh so loud I woke up the dog.
And it just got better from there. I didn't know what savate was till I started reading this so I geeked out for a minute or so and watched a video. ;) Dont laugh! I love your descriptions of their fights, and especially in the ice cream scene, how th fight blends seamlessly into the visual of Cordy cleaning sand out of her shoes, and then into them getting all hot n horny. ;)
I also love how you're upping the tension with each chapter. This life may suck, but in it, she's got Angel. What if she gets her wish and goes home? Will he still buy her a coffee? That line summed up your theme so poignantly. Sigh.
lol. I'm glad you liked the ocean fight (and the demon name, heheh). :)
Totally not laughing over the savate! I didn't know what it was either until I started writing this story -- I wanted Cordy to have learned some form of self-defence, so I googled different versions of kick boxing until I came across this. In my head, she chose this other the others because it was French and therefore more exclusive, heheh. I'm glad you think the fight scenes work, because I totally have no clue how to actually write actiony fight scenes! I just... bluff, heh.
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"I get attacked by a Lisp demon!"
This made me laugh so loud I woke up the dog.
And it just got better from there. I didn't know what savate was till I started reading this so I geeked out for a minute or so and watched a video. ;) Dont laugh! I love your descriptions of their fights, and especially in the ice cream scene, how th fight blends seamlessly into the visual of Cordy cleaning sand out of her shoes, and then into them getting all hot n horny. ;)
I also love how you're upping the tension with each chapter. This life may suck, but in it, she's got Angel. What if she gets her wish and goes home? Will he still buy her a coffee? That line summed up your theme so poignantly. Sigh.
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Seriously, though -- I wanted it to come off creepy, so I'm glad that worked for you. Yay!
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Totally not laughing over the savate! I didn't know what it was either until I started writing this story -- I wanted Cordy to have learned some form of self-defence, so I googled different versions of kick boxing until I came across this. In my head, she chose this other the others because it was French and therefore more exclusive, heheh. I'm glad you think the fight scenes work, because I totally have no clue how to actually write actiony fight scenes! I just... bluff, heh.
The theme works! Yay! :)
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