Comments | anowlinsunshine: Fic: Where There Are No Phones [Star Trek XI]

anowlinsunshine

Fic: Where There Are No Phones [Star Trek XI]

Dec 19, 2009 11:31

Or, the one that's based on an idea I've had since week three in ST fandom, way back in May, and that only now decided it was ready to come out. We'll see how this goes.

Title: Where There Are No Phones
Fandom: Star Trek XI
Pairing/Rating: Kirk/Spock; R
Word Count: 9,530 (or thereabout)
Date Completed: 18 December 2009
Disclaimer: These people? ( Read more... )

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anowlinsunshine December 20 2009, 14:36:06 UTC

Thank you so much!

kataren December 19 2009, 18:11:18 UTC

Ouch. Owowowowowowowowow. I can't even begin to imagine losing my memories. And, the guy saved EARTH, for crying out loud! They couldn't search the whole planet a few dozen times? Bureaucrats.

anowlinsunshine December 20 2009, 14:37:27 UTC

Amnesia is definitely a situation that terrifies me to imagine, so I'm right there with you. On the bureaucrats issue, too.

Thank you for reading!

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anowlinsunshine December 20 2009, 14:40:22 UTC

That is actually a very good, logical idea. Well done, you!

Thank you for reading!

danse_amore December 19 2009, 18:57:27 UTC

This is absolutely, gorgeously, incredibly good. Your Spock is perfect and your Kirk is perfect but that's not even what I love best.

As a writer I am totally and completely jealous of the beautiful style you have, a sort of floating-distant-dreaming narrative flow that I can't even...it's like needlework. You tell us the details that don't matter because those are the ways that a story is real, the stitches that make up the tapestry, and those are the ones that you slide along your thread and let us see. Things like the way the stone feels against Anthony's skin, pricks into his ass and back, the way that his shoes are too small and how he talks to himself, that kind of stuff, the stuff that makes humans human and the world the world, the stuff that makes us believe.

I'm a little bit in awe, honestly. Amazing. ♥

anowlinsunshine December 20 2009, 14:44:51 UTC

Wow. I am so ridiculously flattered right now, I'm blushing. My style is something I'm still working on and adjusting, and as of now, I'm not entirely comfortable in it, at least in my opinion. It is so humbling and sort of mind-blowing to hear that it works like that for you, though, because that's an aspect of writing I've always envied in other authors, and to be told I have it myself? Excuse me while I go thoroughly embarrass myself dancing in a corner in glee.

Thank you so much for reading, and for the wonderful feedback! You have made my weekend like you wouldn't believe. ♥

awarrington December 19 2009, 19:07:51 UTC

This was a beautifully written and crafted story. Such a simple premise, but you crammed so much in to give it breadth and depth. I loved your characterisation of Jim - understands the necessity of routines but hates them, his contrary nature finding ways to add distruptions that make his life more interesting. It was as if by allowing the routine he was giving up something, and accepting his new life, when a part of him clearly hadn't, was still fighting to remember.

I loved it when Spock arrived, and his 'logic' as to why he didn't tell Jim who he was, was sound. How fitting of all those who could have, it was Spock came looking for Jim.

It was wonderful how Jim, in a setting away from the routines of the ship, was able to redefine their relationship, to deepen it for when they return.

I really enjoyed this story. Thank you so much for contributing to the Advent Calendar. :-) xx

anowlinsunshine December 20 2009, 14:57:50 UTC

Such a simple premise, but you crammed so much in to give it breadth and depth.One thing that's always irked me about amnesia!fic is how most of it seems to be the perspective of those who do remember on the struggle of the one who doesn't to regain his/her identity. In my opinion, though, the process of recovering your identity, especially in an atmosphere where you don't have anything left over from before to remind you of who/what you were, is so much more incredibly fascinating, and I loved exploring that process with Jim. I'm glad that the assumption that I worked on -- that he is still, at heart, the same person with the same basic personality traits, regardless of if he can remember the experiences that helped define those aspects of him -- worked for you. And your point about routines and his acceptance of his situation isn't actually one I had actively considered while writing this, but it definitely fits so well into explaining his motivations and thought processes throughout the story. Thank you for the new insight into my ( ... )