Obvious Fact

[anothersquirrel]

A  tf_rare_pairing weekly prompt.

This kinda changed from how the bunny first wanted it, but the bunny decided it wanted something more, and it led to... this, whatever this is.

I'm not so sure about how well I did Soundwave, so let me know how I did with him.

Title: Obvious Fact
Pairing: one-sided Soundwave/Prowl
Prompt: Soundwave/Prowl - Information Withheld,

Comments

[xxsomeoneelsexx]

Whoa. o:

I think you pulled it off really nicely. Evil!Prowl was amazing and evil and... yeah. Well-written. I think the head-crushing thing helped emphasize his nature, gave him more character.

One thing: you wrote "emotional scaring" when I think you meant "scarring."

[anothersquirrel]

Ok, fixed it, thanks for letting me know.

It's good to know that I didn't go overboard with the head-crushing. Thanks

[xxsomeoneelsexx]

Welcome!

Yeah, I like when characters do something to show their personality. Compared to "Prowl is completely evil," "Prowl is the kind of mech who'd step on a dead guy's head without a second thought" is more illuminating of his personality.

[xxsomeoneelsexx]

...how was I not logged in just now? o.O;;;

[loverandrival]

I'm impressed with the direction you took the prompt. When I read the intial prompt, I didn't think about either one being a spy. Which is a pretty kool little twist and idea.

There's a few mistakes, but minor (the reader still being able to follow the flow of the story). All-in-all: a good story :D

[anothersquirrel]

Really? The prompt screamed spy to me.

Thank you

[fianna9]

Very well-written story. The idea that Prowl is manipulating the Autobots to that extent is creepy and entirely believable.

[anothersquirrel]

I'm glad that this came out as believable as it was supposed to be. Thank you.