FIC - United Front: Ch. 3 - Interruption ~Renji/Ishida ~R

[annieroo2]

Story Title: United Front
Chapter: 3 - Interruption
Pairings/Characters: Abarai Renji / Ishida Uryuu and Ishida Ryuuken
Spoilers: mild spoilers for the Heuco Mundo manga arc
Warnings: angst, yaoi, language
Rating: R
Word Count: 5011
Description: It really sucks when your Dad finds out you’ve been having sex with the enemy
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Comments

[hu3long2]

OMG.... squuee...*is speechless* You hit all my Renji buttons. (Well, the Ishidas as well, but you know my fav is Renji.) The knight in shining armor! And his initial conversation was just so hilarious and his thought processes-- either he'd be a hero or dead-- that's just so Renji, barging into things! The threesome with the two Ishidas! Only Renji would come out and say something like that! And then, as both Uryuu and Renji noticed, channelling Byakuya and turning it into a mediation-- I love that section! The two of them are so effective as a pair-- a one-two defence against Ryuuken, with Renji, Renji, finishing it off! I do like idiot Renji, but I love mature Renji even more. Or rather, a Renji who does show his maturity and shows that he can learn. *multiple squees* And why is the idea that Renji is still trying to deal with Uryuu's love confession soo compelling? I can see all sort of reasons why Renji is slower to come to terms with his feelings than Uryuu, who is normally so reserved and cool. Age, experience, character,

[annieroo2]

*laughs* Renji does seem to encompass the best of both worlds, Idiot, yet still mature enough to know better. I know you're a big Renji fan, but I'm happy Ishida worked for you here to

[hu3long2]

Oh no, I wasn't criticizing that conversation! I thought it was very effective in breaking down Ryuuken's resistance, and Uryuu's accusations are pretty comprehensive, especially when it comes to their father-son relationship, so that was definitely convincing and I think, for me, that would probably be the first chink in Ryuuken's armour, before the relationship with his own father. Uryuu's words concerning the dynamic between him and Ryuuken are also a lot stronger since it wasn't just about behaving like a Quincy, but about being father and son in very fundamental emotional ways.

Well, I did wonder about the Renji coming out of the shower and smelling good part :-0 but decided that you did want to say indolent *grin* But now you have me wondering what a non-ByaRen Renji would smell like coming out of the shower. (Whe it's ByaRen, Bya switches all Renji's toiletries to his own personal preference...)

[annieroo2]

Oh I didn't take it as a criticism. I understand perfectly that not everyone sees characters the same way. It's what makes fanfic so much fun. I am happy it worked for you despite any differences of opinion. That's makes me feel like even better. :D

*giggles* That mistake still makes me laugh.

Sandal wood, definitely. *laughs* Actually on his own he's probably too practical to chose anything special.

[thewaywardrose]

I love the way you write these two! The taunting and insulting is so damn cute. XD I can't wait to read more!

[annieroo2]

Awww, Thanks. I love writing them, so it's always nice to know when I've done well enough at writing them to make others happy.

I appreciate you reading and commenting! :D

[beautifvl_flaw]

Ooh, nice chapter! I really like the unitedness (Is that actually a word?) of Renji and Uryuu here. Renji's daring and rather crude 'rescue' of Uryuu from his father was a perfect balance of adorable and hilarious, and it was great to see the reassurance it lent to Uryuu, even if he was shocked or annoyed at Renji for pushing things quite that far. I look forward to reading how things progress further XD

[annieroo2]

*laughs* I don't know if it's actually a word or not, but I like it!

I love it when the boys are united. It's how I love to see them best. And the side of annoyances and and humor are staple side dishes for them in my eyes.

I'm so happy you enjoyed reading this and took the time to leave me such lovely comments. I really appreciate it. :D

[vayshti]

I'd tucked this away to read at my leisure ;).

I love Renji's asides to himself when he's channelling both of the Kuchiki's. I love how you use him to explode a scene which you make your reader fall into - whilst seeing it withing the Ryuuken/Uryuu dynamic not once did I think anything more than 'Ishida doesn't deserve this,' but it was only with Renji's external POV did we get the knowledge to explain why this was so - just like Uryuu would have been struggling.

(Also love the fact that Ryuuken is an awkward yet loving prick)

I AM ALSO TOTALLY IN LOVE WITH THE IDEA OF RENJI AS A RONIN. Man, if I ever read/write AU fic, that's gotta be top of my list.

(how long to we have to wait til Ch4? Huh huh huh?)

[annieroo2]

*cries* And here I thought you'd abandoned me. XD Not really, but it was nice to see your comment

[vayshti]

The Kuchiki references definitely weren't annoying. The way you framed them, explained them worked very well - so much that their essence really was called into the space as well.

The fact that the POV switches were in such large sections helps a lot. I'm not great at writing multiple POVs - I know it's a weakness in my writing, so I can't offer any other methods of doing this and keeping all the important sections in place.

If you ever find Ronin!Renji let me know. I may break my usual AU avoidance for that.

I'm always patient. Not that I'm not also dying to keep reading! Hee - if it encourages you to write more, I'll happily wail at you that i neeeed MOAR. :D

[annieroo2]

\o/ for the Kuchiki's.

I'm always afraid of multiple PoV's in one chapter. I'm always concerned it's going to make reading it too choppy. Though there are just times I can't seem to get the story told without it, so I breakdown and do it, and just hope I don't alienate too many people.

*laughs* Now I'll be checking every AU fic for Ronin!Renji. XD

Chapter 4 was done, but yeah it needs some reworking. So....

[rweon]

oh Ryuuken.. you're just pissed cause you're not getting any from Aizen. 8D *runs away*

[annieroo2]

*laughs* Thanks for reading!