FIC - Belated Realization ~Kenpachi,Yachiru ~PG13

[annieroo2]

Title: Belated Realization
Pairings/Characters: Zaraki Kenpachi, Kusajishi Yachiru (no pairing)
Spoilers: none
Warnings: character death
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 1049
Prompt: death fic
Written for: week #32   bleach_contest
Description:  As the war crawls to a close the death of someone so precious batters the heart
Beta:   yawns_widely  

Comments

Don't feel depressed. Maybe we can chat later, lightly...

[yawns_widely]

I'm unsure if you'd done so already as LJ is playing up on me, but I'm sure there's a Ken/Yachiru comm that you need to post this too.

I like how imaginative you've been with the two of them, esp. how you've incorporated Yachiru as a battle handicap and its obvious appeal for Zaraki. That's what I liked best in this, 'cos it's like you've really got into his head, and put thought into his motive, and aspects that would be important to him.

This is very touching, (and a little painful in the best sense) and I think you've done a good job of communicating the love between them. I'm a real sucker for death scenes and this definitely cuts.

Re: Don't feel depressed. Maybe we can chat later, lightly...

[annieroo2]

*laughs* Oh the depressed part was because I was actually posting this. You know how I hate death stories and here I wrote one that totally tore me up

KON!!!

[yawns_widely]

HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA ...

... TOTALLY WORTH THE WRIST STRAIN :P

Re: KON!!!

[annieroo2]

Yeah it was totally was just that fun. *laughs*

I did get it written. I want you to know though it's absolutely horrible and not the least bit funny.

Oh it's full of wank and crack, but completely devoid of humor. Now, how stupid is that? Any normal person would surely be able to write Kon with humor.

Not me apparently. *sigh* See, I really do suck at character prompts. Give me week to try and at least make it readable, before I post it for you.

*hugs*

[akuni]

Argh, I'm so sorry but I've got too much going on this weekend to properly comment, but let me just say a few things on the run, as it were.

Ow. My heart! :( I adore the platonic love between these two, and I don't think it gets enough attention in fandom. Beautiful portrayal of their familial bond. *wipes a tear*

Unohana politely requesting bankai is so full of exciting layers that I am dying to explore, but again my too-full plate prevents it at this time. That's a great touch, it really is.

Lovely piece. :)

(BTW I'll also say that I see some improvements in the flow of this one compared to some of the previous ones. Yay!)

[annieroo2]

*laughs* You have to know by now that even a dashed off one sentence comment is total love to me! XD

[antha_aryn]

I had an incredibly well worded comment in my head when I first read this yesterday (or was it two days ago)...but completely forgot what it was. ::fails::

ANYWAY!

I just...oh, wow, heart-breakage!

I especially loved: "For the first year, I carried her with one arm and fought with the other."

I can just totally see that being the way it was for the two of them and strangely enough it's an adorable image. Baby + blood = adorable? Antha, wtf.

But I love the emotion you put into it. Poor Ken-chan, the unwitting father. Typical of him to not realize the bond that was formed and the fatherly love he felt for her until he's losing her.

Also, Unohana: "...bankai, please..." = GOLD! ♥

[annieroo2]

Weee!!! I'm just so happy you read and that it made an impact!!! That's all I really need. :D

Well for Kenpachi baby+blood really is adorable. Okay, a little twisted, but cute nonetheless. ;)

I'm so excited everyone seems to like the addition of Unohana. I just love her. Besides, I had to give some hope in the end. Killing Yachiru tore me up.

Thanks for the lovely remarks! *hugs*

[marinliliz]

This is beautifully tragic. You've wrote their platonic but so true relationship so good. Really caught all the essential. Love it.♥♥♥

And a very strange thought occurred to me, before I realized that the last line was from Unohana (sometimes I can't keep up with all the captains and their's zanpakutou XD) I got the impression that Yachirou had somehow become Kenpachi's zanpakutou. It's such a wild and strange idea, but in light of your fic it would be a more happy ending.

[annieroo2]

*sniffles* Thank you. I love these two so much, it hurt to write. That you loved it makes me feel all warm and fuzzy though.

You know you're not the first person to say something about Yachiru being Kenpachi's sword manifested. I have to say it's a very intriguing idea. Not likely in my mind at least, but thoroughly adorable anyway. ;)

Thanks so much for reading and commenting! *glomp*

[fine_lights]

I really love the idea that Zaraki knows Yachiru would follow him to death and beyond, yet she's the person who made him realize the value of his own life.

And I know this is supposed to be death fic but I want Unohana to saaaaave theeeeem! t__t

[annieroo2]

Awww! Thank you. It's always so gratifying to know what about a story touched someone.

I know it was supposed to be a death fic too, but Unohana wouldn't let it end there without at least trying to help. And since she's a very commanding woman I let her. :D

Truthfully it was supposed to end the paragraph before and I just couldn't let it with that kind of finality. Cause me, I'm all about hope. ;)

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. :)