Thank you! I hope it wasn't too twisty. I almost put a warning for the need of aspirin in the header info, but I was terrified to give my twist away! ;)
Oh this is all kinds of awesome!! Very cool to see what would have happened had we seen some of Jack's "dreams" come to life. Some other things:
1. I Lol'ed at "There's a skirt down there somewhere too, but he isn't looking." Granted, it wasn't Real Sam, but it's so something that would go through Jack's head.
2. I love the little details you describe. The notion that Sam would recognize him as Real Jack because of his General stars would never enter my mind, but it makes total sense. Heart it!
3. "She has a long braid over one shoulder and smells like hay and sunshine and something else he can’t quite place." This shows how you can paint the most vivid pictures with the right words. Sentences like this make me smile :)
4. I've always been intrigued by this Fifth-created "universe" (for lack of a better term). It gives you a plausible way to include all those people we love in a story that wouldn't usually be there: Janet, Charlie, Kawalsky, hell even Mary Steenburgen! ;)
Thank you! (I love it when people take the time to tell me what specific parts they like. :)
I was hoping Mary Steenburgen wouldn't be too much of overkill, but I really wanted not only a sense of manipulation, but that the Replicator was obsessed with creating "better" realities, thinking a form of perfection would be irresistible. But perfection only makes Jack suspicious. (Almost always.)
Thank you! I always wanted to play with the shippy possibilities of the RepliCarter. Her existence opens up so many plot bunnies! Though, really, it was all about seeing if I could pull off a bait and switch. ;)
I actually don't know, which is entirely the point, I think. The first time I read it, I loved the idea of a final resolution, but the second time through, I'm not so sure. The ambiguity is quite fantastic--very well done, indeed!
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I really bought that they had gotten home. Damn, you're good! :D
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1. I Lol'ed at "There's a skirt down there somewhere too, but he isn't looking." Granted, it wasn't Real Sam, but it's so something that would go through Jack's head.
2. I love the little details you describe. The notion that Sam would recognize him as Real Jack because of his General stars would never enter my mind, but it makes total sense. Heart it!
3. "She has a long braid over one shoulder and smells like hay and sunshine and something else he can’t quite place." This shows how you can paint the most vivid pictures with the right words. Sentences like this make me smile :)
4. I've always been intrigued by this Fifth-created "universe" (for lack of a better term). It gives you a plausible way to include all those people we love in a story that wouldn't usually be there: Janet, Charlie, Kawalsky, hell even Mary Steenburgen! ;)
Long story short, I loved it. Can you tell? :D
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I was hoping Mary Steenburgen wouldn't be too much of overkill, but I really wanted not only a sense of manipulation, but that the Replicator was obsessed with creating "better" realities, thinking a form of perfection would be irresistible. But perfection only makes Jack suspicious. (Almost always.)
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Good writing, good story, very painful--all just as I expect from you! Thanks for sharing....
Melissa M.
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And a happy ending!
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And a happy ending!
You think so, huh? Interesting. :D
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I actually don't know, which is entirely the point, I think. The first time I read it, I loved the idea of a final resolution, but the second time through, I'm not so sure. The ambiguity is quite fantastic--very well done, indeed!
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