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annemariewrites

Week Four: Those Who Do Not Remember the Past

Feb 28, 2010 00:24

Trying something new with this one. It's rather dark (and fun). Thanks everyone who's commented and voted for me! I really appreciate it. :)

HeartbrokenHe never looked at anyone the way he looked at me. He never smiled at anyone like he smiled at me. I knew this because I watched him. I secretly followed him from location to location, all across ( Read more... )

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lesleysays February 28 2010, 14:02:43 UTC

I see you've used life experience in this one :P

So, should I send an email and warn Maggie?

annemariewrites March 3 2010, 04:46:10 UTC

You nutter :p

saffronlie March 1 2010, 07:11:39 UTC

Creeeeeeeeeeeepy! But brilliant.

annemariewrites March 3 2010, 04:51:48 UTC

Thanks, bb. I miss you on gchat. I feel like there's a hole in my evenings.

saffronlie March 3 2010, 11:27:23 UTC

I recommend starting a PhD thesis to fill that hole. I miss you. :(

annemariewrites March 14 2010, 10:09:03 UTC

I missed you tonight. You were on gchat, but I had to run to my guitar lesson (which hurt my fingers real bad). Now that we've change our clocks, maybe we can stop passing like ships in the night. Ha ha

vyvyan_wilde March 1 2010, 17:03:11 UTC

Very creepy!

I like the way you captured her ravenous, obsessive love for him. The way she said he made her promises in his smiles sounded so genuinely like an obsessed fan.. it's kind of hard not to get sucked into her vortex of insanity and start to believe her.

In all likelihood, the guy didn't even know her face or recognize her as anything more than one of the fans, even as he inadvertantly drove her into bankruptcy and ruin.

This was a very sad story :( Very well-written though.

annemariewrites March 3 2010, 04:57:56 UTC

Is it wrong to admit that I found a kind of sick pleasure in writing this? LOL! I wonder if I should write it from his perspective because I think, in the back of his mind, he did recognize her. Just not the way she wanted. Aww, fanatics.

pauljoy March 1 2010, 23:16:56 UTC

Whooooooooooooaaaaaaahohohoh.
That is TERRIFYING.
It's taken "stalking" to a whole new level... a creepy level. *shivers*

I don't get one part though. He gave her money? Or is that just in her head...?

But really, lovely (creepy) job on this! You've got my vote :)

annemariewrites March 3 2010, 05:16:16 UTC

YAY! Glad you were creeped out. >:D Oh, so she believed he'd pay off all her debts when they finally got together. Only that was never going to happen. Aww. Poor crazy stalker.

Thanks for reading.

pauljoy March 4 2010, 02:58:37 UTC

I like how you said "poor crazy stalker" XD
It pretty much sums up the whole story :3

desert_rose March 2 2010, 09:31:00 UTC

You did an excellent job with this entry!

This story is so true- I have a feeling many fans have thoughts like the ones actually acted out in this story.

Good luck!

annemariewrites March 3 2010, 05:20:58 UTC

Thank you so much! I think I've been on the verge of crazy fan a few times, but there's always that common sense that tells me when to back off. At least in fiction you can take it to the limit!